No Subject.

we took a drive under dying skies,

and i smiled as we passed on by,

those sunflowers,

as they danced in the wind.

 

you said "forever" if there was a "we"

but that wont mean a thing,

when all thats left is those dried sunflowers

that you picked for me,

still hanging from my window...

 

Unfinished.

 

Reviews

[KalebMatthew]

Touching, with vivid imagery.
How would you feel about removing the comma at the end of the second paragraph? I don't think creating a pause there served the poem.
Grammatically, you might need to add a comma to the 'thats'.
Aside from those small grammatical things, gotta say - what a wonderful poem. Thanks for writing it.

[Sarrow]

That had a really beautiful feel to it and I loved the way it ended, softly but with that sense of beauty.