I unravel

just a poem I wrote for fun

I unravel around you

I fall to pieces you call worthless

yet I call you perfect

they say we're not meant to be together

I say they can die

and you'd do it to

just to make me happy

you would make them disappear

I'll say all the things you want to hear

and you'll take my breath away

to watch me choke on the words

I'll be whatever you want

and you'll take my soul away to stay with you

I'll change until I can't remember who I was

all for you

and you'll call me beautiful

call me your's

and you love me

because I'm everything you want

but I'm not me

Reviews

[Adreamer's Bluejay]

This was interesting to read. It was both heartrending and beautiful. I enjoy the way you told your side of the story, and I ache for you, but I also wish perhaps that it didn't hit home as much as it does.

Nicely penned.

[Emily]

Love the first line!
It really pulled me in!
Keep it up!!

[Coyote Poetry]

A powerful tale and journey told.
"I'll change until I can't remember who I was
all for you
and you'll call me beautiful
call me your's
and you love me
because I'm everything you want but I'm not me"
When love overtake us. We can change willingly or not. Perfect place or not. Good words left something for the reader to think about. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[AliciaB]

Hm. A poem you wrote "for fun"... I wouldn't exactly describe this as such - but hey, I've written plenty of pretty dark poems myself just for the fun of it, so I can see where you're coming from! :) The relationship described in this poem is interesting, and a little disturbing, I suppose. The speaker is willing to give up everything, even their own identity, for the person whom they love, even though said person seems to be toying with them, at one point essentially calling them "worthless" while later calling them "beautiful" and loving them. The speaker has to give up so much for this person, yet seems eager to do so. It doesn't sound like the most healthy of relationships... but it's interesting to think about. Nice work!