response 2

Since I may respond to someone's work via some verse, I'll always copy it for archival purposes. This is one of those instances...

A world so proud

as to shroud

truth within the porridge

simple things like

coming out

kept within mind's storage

Separate still

the coming in

delusions of the times

all came out

of this world

nil comes in as slimes

green clogging ideologies

such are slippery slopes

perpetual debaucheries  

rolling for high hopes

Author's Note

"Separate" is separate.

Reviews

[Rachel U.]

Very interesting. I never considered writing my responses to people as poetry. I shall try it one day (although obviously not today =P ).
Anyways, I found the flow of this quite good. The one capitalized letter in "Separate" did throw me off a little bit and "minds" should have an apostraphe, but otherwise, fantastico! Your rhyming scheme was perfect - oftentimes people forget about it, and fall in and out, but yours stayed consistent. I very much enjoyed this composition.

[Syldor]

Wow. This i definitely.. something. I'll admit I had to stop and re-read... all of it. It is certainly amazing that you are able to incorporate poetry into your everyday responses.