It's Dystopia Baby

I am your Dystopian girl
got a black leather vest
here at the bottom of the world,
wearing shades so I can't see the decline.

I stand in the dark and wait for nothing
under this rusted and broken street lamp.
Heat from crowded streets and hustling alleys
keeps the blood moving in my veins for now.

Lament if you need, cry if you want
buy into the creed, it's Dystopia baby
that we made by hand with our friends
we like to call misery and disease.

We're always looking for someone else
to step up to the plate but the
early bird special is apathy baked.
It's Dystopia baby, wake up and smell the decay.

Reviews

[TL Boehm]

wearing shades so I can't see the decline. This poem has a wonderful bite to it.

[icelandicblue]

Hey how are you? I don't know why but I'm find of this one myself. Thanks as always.

[Kasey Miriam]

A powerful, painful reality. Very well expressed point about the world we live in

[icelandicblue]

I came back to read this one and noticed your review. I belatedly thank you.

[Rita L. Sev]

Wow, Blue. This is so painfully true, so perfectly expressed. We are a world wallowing in misery of our own making...

[icelandicblue]

That we are Rita...that we are. Thank you.

[Creepy Swine Guy]

Whew! ... That's ominously beautiful and on point. And are you the Overlordess of this dystopian world?

[icelandicblue]

LOL...they could do worse! Oh wait worse would be the point wouldn't it? Good to see you in my dark little corner. ; )

[Confuser]

Your writing is so delicious it makes me want the apathy, without a thought. It flows to a tight delight. You really "stepped up to the plate" with this one. I love the metaphors. It is brilliant and your words brought a loud bright smile to my face. Your mind brought this work of art together is such a delightful way. "wake up and smell the decay." Wow, I am always impressed. This is going in my library. Thank you for the great writing, once again.

[icelandicblue]

Thanks so much Confuser. You're a doll and thanks for the fave.

[Confuser]

Y/W...............................................so true. Great writing, as always.

[Bright Ocean Star]

You have an edge to this one that is brilliant for the piece. You master the art of word choice. The topic is dark, but prophetic. We're headed there if we don't change our ways. I especially love the last stanza.
"We're always looking for a hero
to step up to the plate but the
early bird special is apathy baked.
It's Dystopia baby, wake up and smell the decay." It is always a pleasure to read your writing.
Great job....

[icelandicblue]

Thank you very much for such a lovely review.

[Bright Ocean Star]

You are always welcome. My pleasure...:) Thanks for leaving your wonderful reviews on my pieces, too..:)

[Woody]

beautiful, stunning and frightening all at the same time. you don't mince your words, Blue. great lines here which I will not pick out. I'd end up rewriting the whole thing! wonderful!

[icelandicblue]

Thanks so much Woody. I like your beautiful, stunning and frightening...thanks.

[Terpsichore]

It's where we're heading, no doubt of that. Time for the second coming perhaps? Then again, look what we did last time. T

[icelandicblue]

It's not just fiction that is true. Thanks for taking the time to read and comment.

[Rene Salinas]

Oh my goodness I get a feeling for how the writing should be interpreted. But in my head (yes that would be "The Dystopina head of mine") The creation of the female image had a great allure and very attractive. Nothing wring with black leather vests at all if maybe a little sweaty. Jesus! I stoold under dark lamps waiting for nothing. In England at this time 4 pm is dark. Misery and desease that's somes favorite Tv channel they seem to have it turned on al lday long. Oh a moment of disagreement for me. "We don't need any more heros " please! everytime one pops up people feel compelled to imitate.

Really, what a great way to create a feeling. I'm not sure that I can therefore balance by saying that if you would have choosen to replace the word Dystopian for Utopian it would have made any difference.

I think the word apathy is waht turns this lines into such an incisive message.

Greatly enjoyed.

Thankyou

[icelandicblue]

Thanks Rene. Apathy knows no heroes I think but others wait around for someone else to fix things. Love your review as always.

[Skai Rain]

This is a great poem. It reminds me of a book I read once but for the life of me I can not remember the title. Was this possibly inspired by a novel? Our world is a dystopia now completely. You are very right that we should not wait around for a hero to rescue us.

[icelandicblue]

I've read them all and seen all the movies. It's a genre I've always followed. Who needs utopia when you've got dystopia LOL. It wasn't originally based on a specific novel but the more I read it the more I feel A Clockwork Orange.