Fog and Bones

A Haiku

The smell of salt swirls
loneliness hangs in the fog
sand white like bleached bones.

Reviews

[Confuser]

You say a lot in this - I love to read between the lines and it could mean so many things. I enjoyed the images I saw in it. thank you.

[icelandicblue]

Thank you Confuser.

[Confuser]

Y/W.....................................................................................................

[R Smith]

like this style, the fog is so eerie can just see it creeping across the sand, makes me feel like a Haiku horror movie, would love that, thanks Ice Lady :)

[icelandicblue]

That will put a shiver up your spine! Thank you Richard.

[Sheila Kline]

Ooooh somewhat eerie, and gets the message across -I love the fog as it gives me a feeling of peace. I am a night person so perhaps that is why.
Great job Ann at saying so much in this style of poetry!

[icelandicblue]

Oh you are too kind Sheila. Thank you.

[Einstein Noodle]

i love the fog .. it puts such a hush upon the scene ..and on the beach no less .. tasting the salt and breathing in .. ;)
E.

[icelandicblue]

It certainly does do that. Thanks so much Einstein.

[Matching Socks]

Sand white like bleached bones.
Brilliant, I've never thought of it this way before but it makes perfect sense!

[icelandicblue]

Thank you so much Ana. I am pleased you liked this one.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

An expressive haiku that conveys images of you alone on a beach where you begin to feel lonliness as you walk along on the sand.

[icelandicblue]

Thank you so much John. The beach can be a desolate place in the fog.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, yes, yes...it's haiku, and beautiful haiku...but....there is a human element hinted here.
the smell of love, but loneliness sits in the fog of the mind, because memory is a white space of bleached bones.

so nice, Anne.

[icelandicblue]

I walk a fine line here with the personification of the fog, but poetic license and all that. I love your thoughts on this piece. Sometimes there is too much white space. Thanks so much jacob.

[Lyn Anderson]

Funny, I always associate white sand and bones, after finding a body when I was a kid. That aside, well done Haiku

[icelandicblue]

My husband found a body once too. Small strange world don't you think?

[Lyn Anderson]

Yes, it is. I was about 8 or 9, and we were on a remote beach. A torso, partially clothed, washed up on shore and my friends, cousins, sister and I were all picking at it. It was exciting for us, as the police had to come to the beach. A drowning victim.

[Baby Ricochet]

Now that's what I call a hiaku

[icelandicblue]

Why thank you very much!