The Garden of the Moon

I stepped through the dark curtain of night
surrounded in the most delicate of beauty
in the garden of the moon.

Cool light illuminated the pale yellow and white flowers
that swayed in a summer zephyr infused with jasmine.
I moved, a silhouette, in soft and silent steps

as not to wake the sleeping denizens
of this midnight paradise.
Caught in the witching hour

I could smell magic in the air
enveloping me, caressing me,
welcoming me to nature's sacred temple.

And it was there I prayed in tinctured whispers
while silver teardrops dotted the ground in gratitude
that my sojourn in this hallowed place would last

until the sun rose and cracked the sky in purple hues
and I am reborn beneath the luminous canvas
ready to venture unto a destiny untold.

Reviews

[kublakhan27]

Upon reading this piece, I had the voice of Patsy Cline ringing in my ears...walking after midnight, searching for you...I'm writing this review with a flu and a cloudy mind so I'm not sure how close I am to the mark, but for me this was an ode to night owls...the vast majority of my work gets written well after midnight, on the eve of the sunrise. Nights are celestial, immune to the deadlines and commitments that plague us under the cold light of day. This was a relaxing and therapeutic piece that truly appealed to my imagination...great work as always my friend.

[icelandicblue]

Thanks so much Steve. I think we all need a quiet and safe place to contemplate it all. Sometimes it's only in our dreams but it exists even in those misty moments. I do hope you feel better soon.

[Einstein Noodle]

i have truly missed you Icey! you must have been getting up early one or more of the last few days .. your description of this "sacred" moment is sublime and enchanting .. i am usually up and take the dog out early ..many times at the "witching" hour and that beautiful creature we call the moon has been set in such a clear sky, crisp air and full to the brim ... wonderful poem that accentuates this experience!
E.

[icelandicblue]

Why thank you Einstein what a nice thing to say.

[NK]

Excellent imagery. Every line:)
All of it brings vivid moments.

[icelandicblue]

Thank you so much.

[Pryde Foltz]

And it was there I prayed in tinctured whispers
while silver teardrops dotted the ground in gratitude
that my sojourn in this hallowed place would last

until the sun rose and cracked the sky in purple hues
and I reborn beneath the luminous canvas
would be ready to venture unto a destiny untold.

We must discover our true selves for sure. Really masterful write, Icy blue. I wonder though if you need a subject in the last line.

[icelandicblue]

That last line was awkward, I have reworded it. Thanks Pryde.

[Pryde Foltz]

Yes, that reads well.

[Aethereal]

You expressed a beautiful image of a Moon Maiden stepping “through the dark curtain of night” moving with her silhouette “in soft and silent steps” through the flowery “garden of the moon”, “nature’s sacred temple” as she’s being “reborn“. You will need a Moon Maiden painting for this poem. I enjoyed the way you set your free verse lines in three’s; Trinities; Earth, Maiden, and Moon. Soft rhythmic flow; This is what free verse was meant to be. If I could create a better Moon Maiden poem, I would, but at the present time, I'm stumped. Should I do so, I'll inform you. In the meantime, I'll make a copy of this poem so I may easily return to it on a moonlit night for inspiration.

[icelandicblue]

I love your image of a Moon Maiden Aethereal. Thank you so much for such a lovely review.

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

I am mesmerized by the intoxicating images that your words conjure up in my imagination. I so love the moon and this poem.

[icelandicblue]

Thanks so much Dale. I am really pleased that you liked this poem.

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

You are most welcome.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

you and Christian....the use of the moon in each of your newest pieces, is so deft and so different.

i like your journey here...in the moonlight, we venture out and do have that feeling of not wanting to disturb the quiet piece of night...we feel like visitors to the moonlit landscape...vowing not to cause anything to get out of place, as we wait to be reborn to the daylight.

beautiful writing here, Anne.

jacob

[icelandicblue]

Thank you so much Jacob. I find the moon enchanting. So much for Zodiac signs...I'm a Leo. Thank you again.

[Clockwork]

Let me start by saying that I really like the mixture of senses in this poem. You've got the wonderful imagery of the flowers. Then you incorporate the scents of jasmine on the wind. Those details really set the scene for the transformation you write about in the final stanza of the poem. Together, those elements really create a magical atmosphere.

[icelandicblue]

Thank you so much. I am so pleased you liked the mixing of the senses in this piece and that the final stanza worked. Thanks again.

[Clockwork]

Your're welcome :-)

[redflutterby]

This is fantastic Anne...and a definite treat for my dark mood. I'd love to step into this beautiful poem and watch that sunrise...them follow destinys path. Glad to see you on here....missed you much!

[icelandicblue]

Good to see you too. I haven't been writing much...I've been reading a ton. The school has a thirty minute all school write once a month and everyone is expected to write so here's my contribution. I am glad you liked it.

[redflutterby]

Ive been on a dry spell myself...and also reading a lot. Trying to replenish my mind. That thirty minute write proved productive!! And I loved it! ;-)