Shards of Splendor In The Gloom

The silver lining slit my wrists
the unicorn impaled me,
slid off the rainbow, broke my neck
now I hang from the old birch tree.

I'd love to smell the flowers
It be grand to laugh so loudly,
but glassed in such misfortune
quiet! or it shatters very soundly.

I want to write of happiness
velvet petals in full bloom,
but lately all I seem to find
are shards of splendor in the gloom.

So should you find a  clover
hold it tight unto your heart,
and maybe, oh just maybe,
it will give you a fresh start.

Author's Note

As good as it's going to get me thinks.

Reviews

[Baby Ricochet]

Darkly satirical and biting. Loved it Blue,

[icelandicblue]

Thanks so much BR...love your descriptions too.

[Gleb Zavlanov]

A beautiful write. You have meshed hope and despair with brilliant emotion to weave a magnificent web of verse. The simple rhyme, the title, and the flowing grace of your words hooked me throughout the entire read. Well done!

[icelandicblue]

Thank you so much Gleb. I am happy you saw both sides of the coin in this.

[Kimmie]

Your title had me hooked, Icelandicblue - And as I read I began to love this piece more and more; it's been the best piece I've read so far (I realise I sound like a dork as I'm new here, ha!)

[icelandicblue]

Well, thank you and this is no dorkiness in anything you have said. I'm glad you like this piece. There are some great authors on this site; prepared to be amazed. I look forward to reading your work.

[Kimmie]

I'm already amazed and blown away. Their are so many young ones who are wise beyond their years. It's outstanding.

[icelandicblue]

Well welcome! We're happy you are here!!

[kublakhan27]

Which is precisely how I've been feeling these days, about most everything. I love this one to death, especially the first stanza...it's so easy for me to relate to this. Sometimes the silver linings are actually grey, but they're as close to silver as we can get. Wonderful work.

[icelandicblue]

Thanks so much-if we found happiness what the heck would we do with it? I am sorry for your suffering though but I understand how you feel. We keep looking through the gloom for a shard of splendor, even if it's a tiny one. who knows maybe we'll find one. Thank you for reading and responding to this one my friend.

[kublakhan27]

A very good question, and a scary one cuz creativity and happiness do not go hand and hand with me. I can tell you understand just by reading your work...writer's intuition I suppose haha But it's great to be back with my friends and reading everyone's work again.

[icelandicblue]

It's true, jacob said it well I need pain to move the pen. It's great to have you back!

[kublakhan27]

Thank you my friend :)

[Ruth]

This is brilliant! Shards of light, however small, are still shards of light...that gloom can brighten, you just brightened my horizon :) Loved this x

[icelandicblue]

Thank you so much Poppy, I am thrilled you liked this one. ; )

[Ruth]

It is wonderful hon x

[jacob erin-cilberto]

why is it so hard to write of lighter things...I think tragedy and pain move the pen...

"I'd love to smell the flowers" too...but I think they are all dead or dying..

oh well...jarring images in this...a well penned piece.

[icelandicblue]

You get it jacob, spot on. Pain most certainly moves the pen for me yet i do long for more sunshine and soft breezes to motivate me too.

[Rachelle]

The wheel shall turn and then you will find the trials you have overcome were mere challenges needed to polish you into the best that you can be. LET YOUR LIGHT SHINE! Luceat Lux!

[icelandicblue]

Thank you sweetbind for your enlightening review.

[David Scott]

Ignoring the gloom will not make the shards less sharp or more beautiful. Yet by looking into the sticky mess, we will see the light and we will learn, remember, or even forget...
The last stanza felt very hopeful. I think you captured strength in the gentle plucking of a green clover...
Well done blue.

[icelandicblue]

Thank you David,

I do believe there is splendor in the gloom but right now it is not easy to find. I will, however, keep looking. Thanks for the review.

[David Scott]

I'm sorry you have suffered disillusion.
Soon... I hope you will find your joy.

[icelandicblue]

Thanks David- I'm trying really hard. I appreciate your support.

[icelandicblue]

I feel another time jump here by your beautiful hourglass imagery of time jumps, deep-rooted, and impaled with beautiful phrasing ... your clover ending is neat, and very special to me, I will tell you one day why, you did inspire me to write something soon.... as always Anne, your roots, walk through your veins, as I read them, feel them, live them.

- Elisa

[icelandicblue]

Thank you for such a beautiful review. I needed that tonight. You are an angel Elisa and your phrase that my roots walk through my veins simply touches my soul. Thank you so much.

So welcome you are dearest Anne. It's my pleasure to give such great writing all it deserves xxx