Culling the Heavens

Oh how I would cull the stars
and the moon from the sky
should I be able to whitewash
the darkened path you travel.

I would bejewel the sinister forests
of your thoughts with the sparkle
of hope and the glow of love
despite your resistance-

gladly burning my fingers
to their very marrow if
the hell fires that cast
long shadows could be thrown asunder.

You must look toward the light
my sweet until it quickens your
heart and fills you with the
peace allowing the inviting

warmth of a future waiting to be
plucked from the very bosom
of salvation, for it awaits you
by the warmth of a hearth
kindled by choices well made.

Reviews

[Julian]

Perfection! I have no other words to really offer; to praise the lines, the meter and rhythm, the sterling imagery, the capturing of passion and empathy- these have all been spoken more eloquently than I could manage. But perfection it is! Thank you for sharing it!

[MoriartyMesa]

This is so spoken word I wish I knew how to express my thoughts. If you ever wanted to this on stage, I think you would make it more brilliant, it screams to be heard allowed.


Loved it.

[icelandicblue]

Thank you so much. It's funny but I always recite my poems out loud before I post. I am working up to the stage. I think I may have one or two that might work in front of an audience. Thanks for the encouragement.

[The Hampstead Poet]

Your writing style is so reminiscent of the famous writers of old, yet your descriptive talent stuns me. This poem is like no other, and is beautiful. I hope to achieve in my own writing what you have here, something so stunning and yet sublime that it knocked me off my feet. I had to read it twice to fully appreciate it. You have crafted something amazing.

[icelandicblue]

I am humbled by your review. I thank you for your enthusiasm and your kind words.

[Abdul Aziz]

Wow! It has been a long time since I wowed at a poem, but the opening stanzas of this one just blew me away. "Oh how I would cull the stars", "should I be able to whitewash the darkened path", "I would bejewel the sinister forests". I don't think I've ever read the word "bejewel" in a poem online. This harks back to romantic poetry, but with a sufficiently modern darkness. The contrasting emotions at play lift this poem beyond a display of just verbal acumen, and prove to us the real talent of the poet. This poem made my day. Thank you.

[icelandicblue]

I am truly humbled by your review. Thank you so much. I love the music of language and I am pleased that you heard it.

[Baby Ricochet]

Slightly nihilistic with a healthy dose of hope. Outstanding work Blue

[icelandicblue]

That sounds just like me to be honest. Thanks so much BR.

[Gleb Zavlanov]

A very lovely poem. I'm not an avid fan of free verse, but the way you used your words has deeply touched me. Spectacular work!

[icelandicblue]

Thank you so very much for your comment!

[Jon Michael Semilla]

I loved how you sprinkled the words in your poem.

[icelandicblue]

Thanks so much for reading and commenting.

[AYVID N]

This is just too good. Awesome. A poem full of hope, warmth, assurance and comfort. Just too good.

[icelandicblue]

Thanks so much Divya.

[Rocans]

I thought this was a magnificent display of the mixture of poetic elements and a very efficient vocabulary. Everything about this was quite crisp and perfect to me...no words were wasted. I enjoyed this immensely. Glad I found you

[icelandicblue]

Thank you for that very kind compliment. Glad to meet you.