Cast Me No Pity

Tires sing on wet pavement
and the sun hides out for today,
my mood  heavy and cloying
it's a dark dreary Sunday.

This time rain provides no comfort
no soothing or salve for the soul,
instead it's a pileup of heartache
that feeds a hungry black hole.

The other shoe is just hanging
waiting for its turn to drop,
here at the edge of such chaos
it will fall but never quite stop.

The glass seems mostly half empty
Or was there a glass at all?
It feels like it's been forever
I've stood with my back to the wall.

But please cast me no pity
I know it could be much worse,
so instead of me just weeping
I've decided to cry it in verse.

Reviews

[Einstein Noodle]

good for you Ice ... we are taken to the edge over and over it seems ... then quite mysteriously it happens... we are calm... confident in comfort of the Highest Power ... and no matter the tempest .. we have become the fortress it breaks on...instead of alone; back against the wall; being pounded... great poem.. so grateful for where it leads me this morning...
E.

[icelandicblue]

Thank you kind sir! I absolutely love your review.

[Einstein Noodle]

peace and joy Icy Blue ..

[Travis Gibson (poetic h..]

"I've decided to cry it in verse"... I can't begin to explain how much I felt this piece, wonderful work!

[icelandicblue]

Thanks so much. You, as usual, are too kind.

[redflutterby]

No pity here hun...just loving understanding. Life's trials never seem to end...we each carry our own pain. When the weight becomes too heavy we cry out to be heard and the empathy of others gives us an extra bit of strength. x

[icelandicblue]

Thanks Red,

You are wise and what you say is true. I am so very tired of suffering. Your visits always make me feel understood.

[redflutterby]

You're always in my thoughts Anne...x

[icelandicblue]

Thank you.

[Edgar Perez]

All i can give is a simple dear smile!
(: this is really nice.

[icelandicblue]

And I appreciate that smile. Thank you.

[Edgar Perez]

Aw Grand (: You're Welcome.

[Gleb Zavlanov]

The last stanza left me speechless...it's just priceless! This poem is a timeless piece, not only for its beauty, but for the deep and powerful message that it conveys. All of these aspects are weaved into one gorgeous poem with lines of pure silk and embellishments of pure gold. Bravo!

[icelandicblue]

Hi Gleb,

Nice to see you again. I am happy that you found beauty in this piece of writing. It's always nice to see you.

[David Scott]

Pity...
Nobody wants it. It is weak and pathetic. Pity is failure on a stage. Pity is the filth of humanities emotional crap.
Yet we all fail. We all are weak. We all see pathetic reflections in our mirror.
Face it, like the children's book titled, "Everybody poops", we need feel no shame.

So weep! Cry rivers! Scream and yell! Crumple to the floor in exhausted submission to the fact you are suffering.
Then, accept comfort. Accept empathy. Welcome the sympathy of those who offer it. Most importantly, offer it all to yourself!
Knowing how it feels, you will recognize others stuck in the rut of meaningless pity. You can then rise and offer them tenderness you learned while weeping. You will know how to shed tears for their pain. You will be a safe and calm audience to applause their ranting. When others lie in heaps of miseries exhaustion, you can assure them it is OK to rest and live the dream of hope before eyes blind to transparent glass of time overflowing with love.
I am glad you wrote this poem. We all need to see and feel the pain in our lives and in the lives around us. Wonderful job!

[icelandicblue]

Thanks so much David for your heartfelt response. It was wonderful to read.

[Latifa]

But please cast me no pity
I know it could be much worse,
so instead of me just weeping
I've decided to cry it in verse.
stuninig emotions and optimism

[icelandicblue]

I thank you so very much. ; )

[Coyote Poetry]

Sometime we must fall down to realize we must get up. I like the flow of thoughts and the good description leading to sort of a positive ending. Good to end in verse the bad and good days. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[icelandicblue]

Thanks Coyote. Your words are wise and I appreciate you sharing them.

[Joyce S. Greene]

Sharing your sorrow is often a good way of "salving" it, Anne. This is a very sad poem and I was moved by your pain. The images are very clever and the verses read very smoothly. Your rhyme is also well done. Excellent poetry!

[icelandicblue]

I appreciate your empathy Joyce and your kind words.

[Lydia Shutter]

To be able to express your woes in a poem is wonderful. Such a catharsis! Nothing write with the occasional pity party though....sometimes we just work ourselves into such a state we need to spend a day under the proverbial covers away from the world. I liked this a lot. Lydi**

[icelandicblue]

Thanks Lydi- cathartic is the perfect description for this poem.

[Great Aunt Astri]

it's good to own your emotions, even when things are pretty rotten. Usually, once expressed there is a cathartic effect.

[icelandicblue]

Very true. Thanks so much for reading and commenting.