She Was Bordeaux

She was Bordeaux;
full bodied with a dark
fruity scent, fermenting
more each day as
life pressed out
her sweet essence.

Her mouth, a worn out
label of words, never
deciphered , silenced
by ordinary men; she
had always been
their best kept secret.

The hourglass girl
keeping time
in measured gulps;
drop dead red
had always been her color

Reviews

[Einstein Noodle]

i grew up in upstate NY where a beer called Gennesee was brewed and sold. the "Gennesee Girl was the main sales image for the beer. i was completely enamored with her and one year she appeared at our state fair. when i saw her she was worn a bit with holes in her black fish net stockings and i was sad for her and when i walked away she walked out of my dreams. i love what you are saying for this woman...tragic as the bottle empties ... hate it that the men who used her can walk away without a thought...
E.

[icelandicblue]

Oh Einstein that is sad. Thank you for sharing that. Some things wear out quickly no matter how glamorous they might initially appear. Have a fabulous day.

[KAOlmsted]

Holy cats...I love Genny Cream Ale *laugh* (being from Syracuse and all)

Okay. Now I'm going to review blue's poem xD

[Justaguy]

Sounds like a woman who gives so much, and gets little in return. Nicely done!

[icelandicblue]

Thank so much Justaguy. Good to see you.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

the woman gives, the men take more of her self-worth away each time...

sooner or later she feels dead red...but not in the gorgeous sense..she feels worn down by life....and has not gotten back half of what she has given...

tragic piece...full of intense feeling.

[icelandicblue]

Hi jacob- I appreciate your reaction to the poem. Thanks so much.

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

Such saddness mixed with such abounding beauty... I feel the longing here; the full depth and clarity of a woman who has seen the world and given more than she has been given herself. Fantastic metaphor, and great imagery. I'm enamoured by this one. Well done, my friend!

[icelandicblue]

Thanks for that Sarah.

[Mark]

a portrait of a woman used. Sad, I feel for her. Nice writing that can evoke such emotion in me.

[icelandicblue]

Thanks Mark, I always appreciate your comments.

[Rita L. Sev]

This is a great metaphor, and you carried through beautifully. You want to say she'll get better with age, but something about those measured gulps makes me think that soon there will be vinegar...

[icelandicblue]

Exactly Rita,

Thanks for the insight!

[Frieda P]

Sounds like an aging femme fatale, love that you compared her lustiness to Brodeaux...really conjures up quite an image and feel for this one....outstanding!

[icelandicblue]

Why thank you Frieda, I appreciate that.

[Frieda P]

This actually reminds me of someone, you're welcome...always my pleasure Anne.

[Joyce S. Greene]

A wonderful character study, Anne. So much implied and much room left to dream. Almost reminds me of Marilyn, except your "hourglass girl" is dark and not blond. I just hope she escapes Marilyn's tragic fate.

[icelandicblue]

I like your take on this one Joyce. Thanks so much, I'm afraid things don't look good for her.

[Angel]

This is positively brilliant!! I love it!

[icelandicblue]

Thanks so much Angel.

[Travis Gibson (poetic h..]

I really loved what you did here, almost made me wish I drank. lol

[icelandicblue]

Ha ha, thanks poetic heroics. I always appreciate your comments.

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

And its always a pleasure reading your work.