Sequined Dreams

Innocence or ignorance?
Perhaps today pure happenstance,
dig your heels and point your toes,
follow where the warm wind blows.

Pursue it while it gently sways,
for these are wine and roses days.
Sweetly seen through big blue eyes,
find your footing near the rise.

Sing your songs, now don’t be shy.
Tap your feet in mock surprise,
soft green turf your carpet now,
lose the furrow of your brow.

Things you know and that to learn,
bundle up your grave concerns,
throw them into canyons wide,
for life’s bounty will provide.

A wanderer on dusty roads,
shedding all your heavy loads.
Breathe in deeply, cool and clear,
skip on paths and feel no fear.

Keep your head above the clouds.
All alone? So laugh out loud!
Finer things await your hands,
sequined dreams and golden sands.

Ply thy wonder of all sights,
rest by hearty firelight,
don your hat a tad askew,
believe that love will see you through.

Reviews

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i really love this poem...but wow...

this feels like something i would have read in the late fifties or early sixties...the simpler times...when life wasn't such a complicated mess.

love the ride here, felt like i stuck out my thumb and the poem picked me up...

i hitchhiked through a bit of nostalgia.

[icelandicblue]

Oh jacob I really like that you got that feel from the poem! Thank you so much!

[Gleb Zavlanov]

A very inspirational poem which beams with a very unique fire! Wonderfully penned.

One suggestion:
In the last stanza, you transition from archaic speech to present. Thy doesn't match with your or you.

[icelandicblue]

Thanks Gleb...it may not mesh as you say but I like it, I could change thy to your but then it feels less lyrical to me and a bit less upbeat or magical. I found ply thy wonder to be the only bit that was archaic and I did not want to overuse it with the other you or your because then I thought it would really just stick out rather than to help move the rhythm of the poem. Thanks for the thought though. ; )

[Gleb Zavlanov]

No problem.

[Rachelle]

Love this! Permission to share with a friend?

[icelandicblue]

Of course feel free to share my poem!

[kublakhan27]

As far as poetry goes, this is the total package...smooth rhythm, seamless rhymes, an uplifting message, and so on. No critiques required here, just a lovely piece that speaks for itself. Splendid work Ice :)

[icelandicblue]

I'm glad you liked it. It is probably the most uplifting piece I've ever written. As you know most of my poetry is on the heavy side. Thanks so much ; )

[kublakhan27]

Oh I know what you mean, we're in the same boat on that one. I'll get something positive written one of these days I suppose haha :P

[Dr. Wood ?]

well I feel better for reading this...I might cheer up now...Thanks ICE

[icelandicblue]

My pleasure, a departure from my doom and gloom. ; )

[Pryde Foltz]

Ply thy wonder of all sights,
rest by hearty firelight,
don your hat a tad askew,
believe that love will see you through.

It is better to get disappointed now and then; then to live your life that way. loved this lyrical piece.

[icelandicblue]

Thanks Pryde,

This is probably the most upbeat piece I have written. ; )

[Healing Star]

good advice, very positive and I like it's flow. very nice.

[icelandicblue]

Thanks so much.

[MsJewel]

Wow! I love everything about this poem - the rhyme, the flow, the gorgeous imagery, but most of all the feeling it left me with after reading. This is so uplifting and inspiring. A poem I will want to read again and again!
:) Julie

[icelandicblue]

Thanks Julie,

I am happy that you found it to be uplifting. I appreciate your thoughts.

[Joyce S. Greene]

This was wonderful! You had me dancing, or at least my heart was, with the pure joy of this poem. Loved the rhythm, the rhyme, the imagery and everything else about it. I am on my desk clapping, and that's not something I do all the time! If I could give you more than 100 points for this gem, I would.

[icelandicblue]

Joyce,

What a lovely review. I am pleased that the poem touched you. I look forward to reading your work as well.

[Joyce S. Greene]

You're very welcome. I hope you like my poems even half as much as I enjoyed yours!

[Angi]

Oh Blue! This is such a wonderful piece! I love the lessons being gently taught. That jaunty hat at the end had me grinning wide! Well done! Angi~

[icelandicblue]

Thanks Angi-love the word jaunty!

[Angi]

Me too! ...and you are so welcome.

[JordanLane]

This is the best part of the trip This is the trip
This is the part I really like

[icelandicblue]

Thanks a lot Jordan. I appreciate your comment.