The Sinner's Club

Choices divide
us, we saints
and sinners.

Traversing lines
of minuscule width-
driven by faith
we foolishly balance like
gymnastic school dropouts,
wavering and wobbling  in
decadent style.

And only the fall of paragons
unites us in our
glorious flawed humanity,
for then we all gleefully dance
beneath the shadow side of the moon.

Reviews

[Angel]

We are all members of that club...
Brilliant work, my friend.

[icelandicblue]

Yes we are Angel!

[Baby Ricochet]

I think I'm the president of that club.

[icelandicblue]

LOL Thanks BR!

[icelandicblue]

I'd vote for you!

[Rita L. Sev]

We wait for the mighty to fall, so we can feel better about our own indiscretions... a strange kind of unity, but it works...

Love this simile:

we foolishly balance like
gymnastic school dropouts

[icelandicblue]

Thanks a lot Rita. It is a strange unity indeed.

[Frieda P]

Seems the moon doesn't differentiate, we all do the same dance, some just fall out of step occasionally...I really like this one Anne. Nice to see you writing something other than....

[icelandicblue]

Thanks Frieda...I know

[jacob erin-cilberto]

we all do dance under the same moon, and there is not that much separation between good and evil..often.

sometimes we are so borderline...as to which way we will go...

either way that moon will shed a light on us...we cannot hide.

good poem.

[icelandicblue]

Thanks, I've been in a slump so I'm working my way back.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

and doing a hell of a job of it! good stuff coming out of you right now, Anne.

[icelandicblue]

You are too kind but thanks.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

not at all...i would not have said that if i didn't believe it true.

[Great Aunt Astri]

How true! Any reason for the three line seven line, five line format?

[icelandicblue]

Thanks and no, it's just how it flowed. It was more a stream of consciousness. Thanks again.

[s y e]

I get it, Anne, after a looooong day and hard work I love coming on to read you and understand because half the time my mind is asleep and I am reading every write over and over, so I am smiling here, haha.

"And only the fall of paragons
unites us in our
glorious flawed humanity,"

-- Such a smart cookie you are, I loved this Anne, amazingly well written as always!

[icelandicblue]

Thank you my dear. Get some sleep. Thank you so much for taking the time to comment.

[s y e]

Off to sleep now. (: Wanted to read you before though.

[外人 (Gaiji..]

such a deep image of the human behaviour, we are so found of categories we forget we all belong to the same race, that's so sadly universal and eternal :( but i honestly think, i honestly hope, we are learning the lesson and one day we will understand.

[icelandicblue]

So true Le parisien! Thanks for commenting.

[外人 (Gaijin)]

you're welcome :)

[Aethereal]

We always define perfection as something that's unattainable, and so the only true paragon is a dead paragon who no longer has the opportunity to discredit him/her self. Perhaps the fall of our paradigms has a greater affect on us since they are much more vulnerable than dead martyred paragons. This is a thinking man’s poem none the less. Live paragons are always walking on egg shells trying not to break 'em, or on tightropes..

[icelandicblue]

Such an erudite response Aethereal. I agree technically with your premise but I don't think paradigm would have the same effect when reading the poem. Thank you so much for taking the time to write such an in depth response. They are always thought provoking and enlightening.

[Aethereal]

I agree that paragon is the better word to use given the context of your poem as it is. Paradigm would be another poem. I didn't say that you should replace it. Most paragons don't fall they just die, and are then immortalized till the paradigm that they represent falls. Where a paragon falls, your poem is valid.

[icelandicblue]

Precisely and thank you again for your thoughts and knowledge.

[Jack...]

Anne, this makes a lot of sense to me. I don't know if that makes me strange or not (we already know I am). But it is such a fine line that we walk, we can take that step in either direction so easily. We will all dance together, but some will love the moon light while others will hate it. Very cool my friend.

[icelandicblue]

Thanks so much Jack. And I agree we all walk some sort of line and we all have to make hard decisions while doing so.