Paper Raincoats

Innocence is wrapped
in a thin candy coat,
exquisitely hued and
smooth,

it pits in the rain
tinting the sewer-

rat ambrosia.

Reviews

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

This is fantastically concise and yet still so hard hitting. I love the emotion here, and the way you bring to life something tangible in an almost personified way. Innocence has never been described in this way, or at least not that I have seen, so kudos to you for a great write!

[icelandicblue]

So often innocence is lost to the nefarious deeds of others. It feeds those blackened souls. I am please that you found my take on the subject unique- that is a high compliment.

[Sarah Conder]

I like how this draws attention to the vulnerabilities of innocence whilst revealing a darker, coarser side. Very thought provoking!

[icelandicblue]

Thanks Sarah, I appreciate that you read and responded to the poem.

[therisa]

Please pardon my sleep deprived mind, but your poem speaks to me, the lost of innocence is that so easily taken, leaving behind the memories, best discarded by the victim.

[icelandicblue]

So very true therisa. Thank you.

[therisa]

Your welcome.

[icelandicblue]

I feel a double meaning into this fine poem. It has not to be sugar coated, but just to let melt in the rain, for it's the truth, it shall find the gutter, when the stream says so.
Nice work...

- Elisa

[icelandicblue]

Thanks Elisa,

Your visits brighten my day.

So do yours with me dear, It's so good to have you here on the Cafe, wonderful work always!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

it's almost like this is referring to a false innocence...a mask of a person that washes off in the rain of truth...and sullies even the sewer with its stench...

fantastic write, in so few words, giving us something abstract to put our heads around...yet saying all that needs to be said.

jacob

[icelandicblue]

Thank you so much for that review jacob.