Sugar Dust

I knew her once in a life
built of sugar cubes
where sweetness reigned
as we licked the
same lollipop carefully
under the spotlight.

Our pirouettes were choreographed,
hers in green and mine in blue
as we flowed across our own stage,
moving with soundless grace while
our souls bled from worn toe shoes.

It was in the red that we found ourselves
beneath the pulsing neon of excitement,
beyond boundaries set, yet unable to
see the heights forcing us to balance on
edges so thin they bent beneath our secrets

A prima ballerina she craned her swan neck back
so that her pupils absorbed each drop of light
and finally she disappeared into her own misery;
my tears of confusion dissolved
our sparkling sugar dust,
leaving one cemented in place
and the other stuck upon
a cracked spider web of pain.

Reviews

[icelandicblue]

This was exceptional, the heart of a dancer, speaks, it could be an old dancer, or a dancer of love... through your words, as also I feel the irony of sugar coating the subject matter, literally. It could be real, aswel fictive. For two ballerina's on a birthday pie for example, or even a wedding cake... this write could go anywhere, but is neat to the core. I feel memories, and the pain of getting older, and have lost friendship or a love in general, as time flies... and memories stay... so good my friend so good this is.

- Elisa

[icelandicblue]

Thanks so much Elisa- the poem is about losing a friend and the devastation that followed.

You're always welcome, I found this very moving... in both (2) ways.

[Einstein Noodle]

great title! very fitting. the intimacy of your first verse lets me experience the pain of this lost love. lots of creative phrases; Sugar Dust simply kicks it! if this is personal, i am sorry for your loss. :{

E.

[icelandicblue]

Thanks so much. Ir is based on real events- we are friends again but it is not the same.

[rhythm&blues]

It's a bittersweet read about friendship, lovely and the imagery is as well.

[icelandicblue]

Thanks R & B-
Friendship is just another roller coaster in life.

[Oceana]

The imagery here is spectacular. I liked this a lot

[icelandicblue]

Thanks so much Oceana. I appreciate your visit.

[Rosalind Gale]

I agree with everyone about the images, lovely. Personally too, it has a resonance. that of my sister and me - being together, fading away, then coming back, and so forth. Always though, there is a bond. Thank you so much for this poem.
-x-

[icelandicblue]

My pleasure, thanks for the review.

[Pete Langley]

This seems about friendship....and how, despite the bond of goodwill and hope for each other`s future, we cannot influence the other for good in the face of ill-fortune. Well done, Blue. P.

[icelandicblue]

I appreciate that Pete. Thanks

[Kristin Lee]

Some fantastic imagery in this piece. I love you last line, "A cracked spider web of pain." Brilliant use of words, they lend to such illusion.

[icelandicblue]

Thanks so much Kristen.

[Angi]

The imagery was really powerful in this one. I am seeing two little girls growing and losing each other along the way. Sad and beautiful, Blue. Angi~

[icelandicblue]

That is exactly what the poem was about except we weren't little. Thanks Angi

[Travis Gibson (poetic h..]

Powerful phrasing here... great write!

[icelandicblue]

Thank you so very much.

[Baby Ricochet]

Some good metaphors in this one. Good job blue

[icelandicblue]

Thanks a lot BR. I appreciate it.