Alpha Babe

His courage circles the drain,
as he watches her walk by-
surrounded by others who,
only inhibit his vision.

She is the scintillating goddess,
currently reigning in his small world.
She is the reflection that the others long for,
hoping that mere proximity would allow her visage to
jump mirrors.

He watches with his back against a cold brick wall,
attempting a cavalier pose that looks staged.
He is all long limbs and sharp angles,
making him look like a discarded marionette.

She is refined and poised from a life of adulation,
and feeds off his hunger without giving him a glance.
She is the alpha babe in this primordial high school pool,
and no lifeguard can rescue him from his current social standing.

Reviews

[SteveB]

AS one who went through High School as a long gangly wall flower who tried to wear a mask I have to say you nailed it! An excellent read. thank you so much for sharing this.

[icelandicblue]

Thanks so much Steve.

[poetry-kiddo alienbaba]

it is ambiguity in sweet isolation

[icelandicblue]

Thanks alienbaba- I always look forward to your visits. They are a breath of fresh air.

[poetry-kiddo alienbaba]

ahaha....i am your favorite insane incense

[icelandicblue]

That you are my friend.

[poetry-kiddo alienbaba]

o-o

[Stefon Napier]

I think that you picked a very good topic to center a poem around.You definitely know how to give emotions image. In that light I was very impressed. It was how you structured your stanzas that threw me off a little. I tended to stop and start with each line even though the sentences took up multiple lines. I also didn't think saying social standing was needed. You provided excellent imagery that showed that.

[icelandicblue]

Thanks a lot for your thoughts and feedback.

[Distant horizons]

Beautifully captured emotions of all the protaganists in this piece. The male and females points of view, as well as those who want and wish. Isn't it a pity though, that as you say, the posturing replaces the contact. Maybe if we were all a bit more free within ourselves, we wouldn't look like discarded manneuins so much :-)

[icelandicblue]

So true Just Lorry. Thank you for such a thoughtful comment.

[shythatway]

Oh! Jump mirrors, loved that line. This was a painfully accurate description of what many teenagers suffer through. (And many adults, too..) Made me think of a poem my grandmother made me memorize as a child, those limbs and angles were a theme there, too. Loved it.

[icelandicblue]

Thanks shythatway, I appreciate your thoughts.

[Pax]

never got a chance to read this but now i do ~ glad i put it in y library... and oh those times... well i had a weird high school, never cared too much on what's around me, who's who ~ but i like this poem for it gives me the memories of my friends escapades...
wonderful work!
~100

[icelandicblue]

Thank you so much Pax. I truly appreciate it.

[Pax]

sorry if i taken so long to review back... but i never forget...
your truly welcome ~

[Muse]

100/100 favorited too. You dived into a world we can all relate too. No matter what social status you are...we have all had that one person that we felt unworthy of...or we felt too superior to test the stereotype and boundaries. Awesome work. Bravo!

[icelandicblue]

Thank you so much!! I am so happy that you liked this poem. ; )

[David Scott]

OMG! Ha. I have to smile. In my day it was the valley girl phase.
The guys don't stand a chance...
Of course, those "alpha babes" often end up like the quarterback. No reality check to prepare them for success IRL.
Loved the poem ice!

[icelandicblue]

Thank you so much...It is so true, popularity is no guarantee of success.

[Angi]

My 17 year old son just read this piece. He walked away shyly smiling, wistfully saying, "I get this, I totally get this." You accomplished what you set out to do here, icelandicblue.

[icelandicblue]

Now that put a smile on my face. So often kids think that our experiences are so different from their own. We do remember what it was like. Thank you so much for sharing that.

[Angi]

Thank you for writing it.

[Angi]

I just saw this pop up on my feed. Still one of my favorites, Icelandicblue! Angi~

[icelandicblue]

Thanks Angi. ; )

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

I know that feeling of seeing a woman that I want to approach but find her well out of my league... A veery well versed poem from beginning to end.

[icelandicblue]

Appreciate the read and the comment. Have a wonderful day.