Breakfast of Losers

Perhaps it has always been the
starkness of being between us,
cocooned stasis
away and between the measured
beats that pound life out of
red licorice-kissed lips.

Fall we did into oatmeal puddled
existence, and there we languish
where the only shared thoughts
are of milk, butter
and sometimes guns.

How I long for another-

hot creamy cereal
to stir my disposition
up to something
more than tepid.

Reviews

[Bradley Layton]

It comes to me as a "longing" feeling. very nice :)

[icelandicblue]

Thank you for taking the time to read and comment.

[Bradley Layton]

of course :)

[redflutterby]

When things have become dull and commonplace we long for something new...and hot!! Lol... very witty!! Love this one blue!!

[icelandicblue]

Thanks Red I'm glad you heard this one.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

lukewarm feelings about life or about a significant others...and sometimes we think of guns...to end it maybe?

such metaphor here...love it, Blue..you are so good..

this is real life too often...Wheaties, the breakfast of champions...kind of fake...bad stuff lies beneath the flakes, in milky splendor...

here you lay it all out for us...maybe i'll have toast. and share some more thoughts with myself...

great write.

jacob

[icelandicblue]

jacob- I love your review. I could not have said it better.

[Sam Gregory]

This is poem of the day for me, such heart warming imagery, very well done here. Keep it up :) The way the 1st part is to the right threw me off at first, but I soon realised I'm an idiot haha

[icelandicblue]

LOL Sam- thanks so much. I'm glad you liked it.

[Sam Gregory]

No problem :)

[Frieda P]

I'm so jealous I didn't think of this one blue! Holy smokes, so few words and you really get the breakfast treat of champions here.

Fall we did into oatmeal puddled
existence....that's killer!

Sounds as though that milk and honey were lukewarm...sweet & sour, I love this!

[icelandicblue]

Thanks so much Frieda. I appreciate your enthusiastic response!

[Jack...]

Wow Blue, this one is incredible. I never know what to expect from you except to expect something wonderful. This felt warm and soft but became
a bit tangy towards the end. (must be the grapefruit juice). Another beautiful piece for our eyes to find.

"Where the only shared thoughts are of milk, butter and sometimes guns"

I'd say, I am here, but most people say that I am just fruit loops.

[icelandicblue]

HiYa Jack,

LOL- nah you're a lucky charm. Thanks for reading and as always your encouraging comments. : )

[Jack...]

Cheerio to you my friend

[icelandicblue]

Good one- here's a virtual apple jack.

[Jack...]

I just go grape nuts over your poetry.

[icelandicblue]

LOL

[quinfinn]

never cared for oatmeal but i love what you are serving here. well prepared and piping hot! who said anything about tepid? this is really good. can i substitute with cream of wheat?

[icelandicblue]

Thanks quinfinn-
I like cream of wheat better myself. My mother fed me every kind of hot cereal in existence including Maypo and Buckwheat. Thanks so much for reading and commenting.

[quinfinn]

personally, i prefer a good old fashioned southern country breakfast....eggs over easy, hash browns, country ham, toast and strawberry jam...and a huge pot of coffee! you are always welcome here, blue