Shadow Tea

Tea was on the tepid side
as was the conversation;
barely a crack in the
skim-coat of pancake makeup.

Moth balls and sighs filled
the void between sips by
smoke-ringed lips, each
waiting for the other to add the
first spark of awareness.

Their unused hearts were unaccustomed
to the normal rhythms of living.
They have become bystanders
reflected in the bakery window,
staring at their own demise.

Reviews

[s y e]

Wow, loved the twist on this one.

This is a relatable write to alot of people, I agree with, Frieda on this one too.

[icelandicblue]

It is so easy to just exist and yet it is so sad.

[KAOlmsted]

I know you're away, and probably won't see this for a while, and it's entirely my fault for neglecting my RR queue for so long, but I wanted to comment...ready?

That first stanza is gold. And the rest? Really great stuff. I'm picturing a couple of spinsters here, finding joy in nothing at all, really...it made me sad. Well done. Hurry back...

[icelandicblue]

Hi kimmer,

Yes, I've been gone for a while, we're not sure if my dad is dying. He fell off a second story ladder two weeks ago and he's in rough shape. Honestly, it's like an episode of house, they are already talking about writing a paper about him. We're not sure what is going on. I've been dealing with it the best I can, families can add as much stress to the situation as the injury...but it's nice to see you grace my page with your thoughts and I miss reading your Judas Me. I'm the health care proxy and I am hoping I don't have to make those big life ending decisions. There will be lots of poems coming about this time in my life. Thanks kimmer for not forgetting me. ; )

[KAOlmsted]

Could never forget you...silly blue ;-) I'm so sorry to hear this, but you made me grin with your reference to House...I had to stop watching that show because every episode I was convinced I had the symptoms of whomever they were trying to save...and then Greggory House just went bat s**t crazy and I was like, meh...too close to home *laugh* Oh man...seriously, though, I am truly sorry...you're in my thoughts. He's a Bostonian, right?? That's a tough breed right there...if anyone can pull through, it's a Bostonian ;-) xoxo

[Mr Dunne Poetry]

So sad, yet penned so beautifully. Thanks for sharing :)

[icelandicblue]

Why thank you. I appreciate it.

[Mr Dunne Poetry]

Yw :)

[Pete Langley]

This is so sad....and so common. Amazingly, it tends to be prevalent among a large proportion of prolonged relationships... where there is a need to regenerate the bond, but no longer the chemical connection. Wooden company is lonely. This piece is excellent. P.

[icelandicblue]

Thanks so much Pete! What you say is unfortunately so true.

[Chris]

THIS has "bite" and truth.

[icelandicblue]

Thanks Chris! I appreciate it.

[Chris]

I really mean it... THIS one is where you meant it to be.

[R. L. Ives]

This could be speaking of complete strangers or married strangers. How sad in either case. You have captured precisely the the tepid feelings that come with a life stagnant.

[icelandicblue]

It is so easy to fall into the malaise of life. Thanks for commenting.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

and here they could probably save each other's heart....but neither knows how to start the communication...been silent for so long..."the unused hearts"

love it.

[icelandicblue]

Thanks so much. I always look forward to your reviews.

[Distant horizons]

hat beautifully expressive language, painting a picture of life without the living, just going through the motions and paying little attention to what is taken for granted, until it is too late.

[icelandicblue]

Lorry- yest that is exactly what I was writing about. Thanks so much for your fine comment.

[Distant horizons]

:-)

[ChemicalMadness]

So sadly wonderful....very nice touch here, really throughout the entire piece. I really enjoyed this.

Cm

[icelandicblue]

Hi CM-

Thank you so much for reading and commenting.