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Your title already spoke so much to me, it has a certain strength, then your words, here, fly dear woman... they fly. Your love for writing and things in life shines so brightly here. " Slide me into the volcano as my core melts even the hardiest of stone so that might flow upon the blue planet in a chariot of orange flames" really gave me an impression of how important "love" in general is... Then so Jules Vernes, in your third stanza, amazingly worded... :) To be as anonymous, and as one with nature, takes a strong soul.... thank you for this outstanding piece of work dear friend.
- Elisa
Posted 11 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
11 Years Ago
Thank you so much Elisa. I love your work and I am honored by your comments. To be one with somethin.. read moreThank you so much Elisa. I love your work and I am honored by your comments. To be one with something as great as nature is indeed to fly. It is always a pleasure to converse with you.
11 Years Ago
This was a piece, of connection, and high feelers... I could live in your words. So thank you dear!!.. read moreThis was a piece, of connection, and high feelers... I could live in your words. So thank you dear!!!
Chalk full of power words,nature has its way of staining your jeans and getting under my nails,the tempest roars till the oceans froth hides the moving lips, strapped in the sail must come down , now, fingers claw, the knife, marlin spike extended digs into whipping canvas wind shreds and we breathe. Prayer can't slow thoughts in action drown me in moment.
Posted 11 Years Ago
11 Years Ago
Ah lee, how I enjoy your responses. You write with frenetic imagery that reflects the sentiments in .. read moreAh lee, how I enjoy your responses. You write with frenetic imagery that reflects the sentiments in the poem. Thank you.
you seem to have created a dialogue between, yourself and the various axes of the earth, as if you are speaking to the world through a tannoy, i so enjoyed the exhaustive imagery, well done
How exquisitely you have projected this image...to be one with the earth annonymously, like everything else we see, at peace. Just a small piece of all that there is, making up the big picture. Blue you write magic, pure magic and I always sit back and try and figure out exactly how does she do it? Very nice indeed.
Posted 11 Years Ago
11 Years Ago
*Blush* thanks so much Jack. As you know sometimes it just happens. I am so happy that you found mea.. read more*Blush* thanks so much Jack. As you know sometimes it just happens. I am so happy that you found meaning and beauty in this. I am honored by your review.
Your imagery throughout is powerful. I love the fury of the river, the melting of your core, and the chariot of orange flames....the inertia in this piece is compelling and provides a polished juxtaposition of action vs inaction. I'd love to see this take on a life of its own and continue a bit - but that may be my own greed shining through. It's a wonderful piece as it stands.
Posted 11 Years Ago
11 Years Ago
Hello ChemicalMadness- What a wonderful review! I love your thoughtful insight to the poem.
I don't know if you've ever been to Iceland but I was stationed there during the
war in the 1970's and the imagery you chose spoke so clear to what
that countryside was like. Your metaphors of volcanoes ,and blue planets, and
curved valleys, and unforgiving depths, and north seas took me there again
in ringing detail. A facinating write.
ps: I was the 31st Black person to ever set foot on Icelandic shores. We kept
record of silly stuff as that back then..
dana
Posted 11 Years Ago
11 Years Ago
Iceland the land of fire and ice! The poem was based on its geographical vitality. It is such a dive.. read moreIceland the land of fire and ice! The poem was based on its geographical vitality. It is such a diversified country. It is not a racially diverse place that is why geneticists love it. Thank you so much for the review.
Wonderfully written. The metaphors in this piece are so descriptive. Good job.
Posted 11 Years Ago
11 Years Ago
Hi Rachel-
It's always nice to see your smiling face, thanks.
Your title already spoke so much to me, it has a certain strength, then your words, here, fly dear woman... they fly. Your love for writing and things in life shines so brightly here. " Slide me into the volcano as my core melts even the hardiest of stone so that might flow upon the blue planet in a chariot of orange flames" really gave me an impression of how important "love" in general is... Then so Jules Vernes, in your third stanza, amazingly worded... :) To be as anonymous, and as one with nature, takes a strong soul.... thank you for this outstanding piece of work dear friend.
- Elisa
Posted 11 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
11 Years Ago
Thank you so much Elisa. I love your work and I am honored by your comments. To be one with somethin.. read moreThank you so much Elisa. I love your work and I am honored by your comments. To be one with something as great as nature is indeed to fly. It is always a pleasure to converse with you.
11 Years Ago
This was a piece, of connection, and high feelers... I could live in your words. So thank you dear!!.. read moreThis was a piece, of connection, and high feelers... I could live in your words. So thank you dear!!!
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