The Stranger

Rattle-skin boots sauntered into
town minutes before the sun
broke out of the east. Her hair
flowed like liquid copper.

Her nonchalant gait was accompanied by
an incandescent shadow that danced in anticipation.
Everyone knew something was coming
on the static charged air.

Houses emptied
their denizens onto verandahs
and lesser front stoops.

She set her sights on the rebel boy
feigning indifference as he toyed with
the pineapple knocker of an old
door that was sliced
symmetrically by the sunlight.

She could compel the most ardent
naysayers with her whiskey soaked
voice and sapphire eyes.

She smiled,

smokey sensuality
seeped through his stubborn
barricade steeping him in a visceral
heart lock with the velocity of lightening.

Without words she took his hand and he
understood the reason for this surreal
encounter. He began to speak but
she shh'd him with her finger.

They began to walk toward the horizon
when she broke the silence in a soft papery
French accent, " I am Amour,
but you already knew that, non?"

Reviews

[quinfinn]

this is blissfully unique in appearance and presentation. you have some delicious role reversal herein which tickles my fancy and creates a lovely story of imagination and love. i absolutely adore this poem! especially, the finish...hollywood wishes they were that good!!!

[icelandicblue]

Thank you so much for the unique comment; that really makes me smile. Sometimes I have no control over what I write, I swear. Ideas dance like demons in my head until I exorcise them on paper (so to speak). This particular one was a fiendish one that wouldn't leave me alone until I wrote it.

[quinfinn]

it is great!

[lee von cleef]

I knew not to wear my hat in New York, No need for spurs there, But I wish I had my horse so I could runaway....

[Matthew Kult]

Hello Blue,

Aggressively romantic like an orange sun unwilling to hand the dusk to a jealous moon.
Great work.

Always,

Matthew
A.

[icelandicblue]

Hi Matthew-

You write the most gorgeous poetic comments. Thanks so much.

[Coyote Poetry]

I like this poem. A very nice set-up for a very good ending. When a woman know what she want. Poor man had no chance. The good description made the situation come alive in vision. Thank you for the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[icelandicblue]

You are too kind. I am happy that you found the images to be vivid and the story to be worth telling.

[lee von cleef]

down past the square, shushed he'd given his hand ,hers tender, his callused more paw then hand, down narrow stairs braced with bricks,smoke,and a wall of fiddle music.Hand in Hand she wove him through the mass,boots smooth on hardwood floors. In the narrow middle ground a space opened up Vassar Clement took control. Vassar must of been fifty fifty-two,he looked older but play....she held her catch, and he was obliged.

[icelandicblue]

Hello! I like your prop work in this story. Thanks for reading.

[icelandicblue]

Just awesome poetry here... with not being cheesy I hope, but what a mysterious piece, of wording into a final truth. It just open all the senses to a reader, especially on your ending. I felt it deeply, I found this perfection.

- Elisa

[icelandicblue]

Thank you Elisa,

I look forward to your poetic comments. I am happy that you enjoyed the poem and that you found the ending to be pleasing. Starting a poem is not necessarily the hard part, but finishing one, at least for me, takes a bit of effort so I am happy that you felt that it worked.

So so true, the endings, are mostly more important than anything, aslo the beginnings, in between it will roll.... I feel you on that. A good poem needs a good beginning and ending. Great work dearest. I'm your fan! and always will be!

[Jack...]

Once more I find myself lost and happily so deep within your words. As if you hold the finest of brushes and the steadiest of hands as you paint a captivating portrait with your thoughts and ideas. Very nice.

[icelandicblue]

Why Jack- thank you very much. I am honored by your kind words.

[Androglossia]

Beautiful your description of the western town and the sultry stranger, my attention was drawn to the rebel boy. It only means that no matter how stone-cold you are, love shows no mercy. And once love finds you, everything that once was, will never be. This is an eccentric write and brilliant at that.

[icelandicblue]

Maryanne,

Thank you so much for visiting and commenting. I appreciate the kind words and the encouragement.

[Androglossia]

You're very welcome!

[Megara]

so romanitic!!!
Je parle français moi-même:)

[icelandicblue]

Chacun parle français aujourd'hui! Merci mademoiselle.

[Megara]

Je pense que tout le monde devrait savoir french.it est une belle language!You sont les bienvenus:)

[icelandicblue]

le Français est la langue la plus belle, j'aime le bruit de l'Italien aussi.

[Megara]

oui, les deux sont merveilleux:)

[icelandicblue]

d'accord.

[Megara]

:)

[DogDrawler]

A unique poem with "parfait" detail.

[icelandicblue]

merci beaucoup!

[DogDrawler]

You speak french too?

[icelandicblue]

je parle un peu, et tu?

[DogDrawler]

Je sais que beaucoup, français es espagnol

[icelandicblue]

Je parle français et anglais et un peu allemand

[DogDrawler]

Eh bien, vous savez bien sûr l'anglais, mais pouvez-vous traduire cela: le cyberespace contribuer à de nombreux désobéissance délibéréé à travers let monde.

[icelandicblue]

Peut-être mais moi suis bien comporté.

[DogDrawler]

Maybe, but I'm well behaved? What does that have to do with this?

[icelandicblue]

I must have misunderstood:
désobéissance délibéréé à travers let monde.
I read it as contribute to deliberate disobedience across the world. LOL

[DogDrawler]

Wait. Is that could read?

[icelandicblue]

No- it's pretty much how I read it.

[icelandicblue]

what did I miss

[DogDrawler]

Well the first part said:

Well, of course you know English but can you translate this:

[icelandicblue]

I understood that it was the last bit.

[DogDrawler]

The second part said ( in which you almost got it right): cyberspace can contribute to deliberate disobeying actions, worldwide.

[icelandicblue]

Ah- true and I am still well behaved in spite of it all. : )

[DogDrawler]

Ohhhhh. I thought you said something random. You were just answering what I typed.

[icelandicblue]

Yes!

[DogDrawler]

If there's any chance, you need help with it. I would gladly teach you.

[icelandicblue]

Thank you, that is very kind.

[Corset]

I got as far a her hair flowed like liquid copper and subscribed, incredible energy running through this one, loved how it ended in a proverbial french Kiss.

[icelandicblue]

Oh thank you so much. I am happy that you liked the liquid copper image- I like that one too. I appreciate you taking the time to read and comment.