Awesomesauce! Loved it. Especially the old love story part
Posted 9 Years Ago
9 Years Ago
Thanks...this is an old one I appreciate you reading it. I'm just so happy I don't have to live it a.. read moreThanks...this is an old one I appreciate you reading it. I'm just so happy I don't have to live it anymore.
Thanks again. ; )
The craving and longing for the next fix. You captured it with your words... They both in love heed over heels with the heroin ...that was very cool capturing of with your words and pen BlueIce
Ah the destruction it wreaks and the carnage it causes means nothing for in the moment of oblivion t.. read moreAh the destruction it wreaks and the carnage it causes means nothing for in the moment of oblivion there is nothing else. I know because my son is a heroin addict who has been in recovery now for 3 weeks...I have faith and hope though, I truly do.
10 Years Ago
If there's a will there's a way. A mile walk but it always start with a step.
10 Years Ago
We have been here before but I will never give up. It is where much of may angst and the darkness in.. read moreWe have been here before but I will never give up. It is where much of may angst and the darkness in my poetry comes from. I wrote my most optimistic piece (ever) sequined dreams for him...for that is what I wish for his future.
One of the best pieces I have ever read about heroin...my only suggestion would be eliminate the last word, the "heroin", simply because you've already written such a powerful piece on the subject, punctuating it with that unnecessary period is, well...unnecessary. I get the whole rhyme thing, but IMHO, it takes away from your amazing write.
Posted 11 Years Ago
11 Years Ago
Thanks kimmer. The rhyme at the end is one of my favorite parts so I am going to keep it. I am happy.. read moreThanks kimmer. The rhyme at the end is one of my favorite parts so I am going to keep it. I am happy that you liked the rest of it though. Thanks, as always, for your in depth critique.
Right on...you know best ;-) Always my pleasure, blue...
11 Years Ago
Thanks- those two lines were the ones that were dancing in my head. I built the rest of the poem aro.. read moreThanks- those two lines were the ones that were dancing in my head. I built the rest of the poem around them so I just can't let them go. ; )
If no-one else dares mention the word threesum, should I?
I may be on the wrong track, but there is more than one form of sex and senuslaity and I have lived most.
Should I be stamping on your finer feelings, I can only apologise.
You caught my erotic.
Whatever your meaning, as reader, me in this case, we can only absorb own own, even if one is speaking Dutch and the other Swedish.
I liked this wherever you were drifting.
It made me smile at the complexity of love, the erotic, and sexual relationships, and even how they can be misinterpreted.
With my kindest regards
James
Posted 11 Years Ago
11 Years Ago
James,
I suffer from no sensitive sensibilities and although that was not my intent your inter.. read moreJames,
I suffer from no sensitive sensibilities and although that was not my intent your interpretation makes perfect sense. In fact it has made me look at the poem in a new way. A poem, I believe, can have as many refractions as those who read it. I am happy that you enjoyed the poem and found meaning and interest in it.
11 Years Ago
Dear icelandicblue
Thnk you for tolerating my review.
With a smile. read moreDear icelandicblue
Thnk you for tolerating my review.
With a smile.
I always find it sesential to send myself up daily to ensure I do not take myself that seriously.
I think your poem and your response to my review are rather more intelligent than my review was.
I am glad though you can see how others might interpret it, in fact their variety. As I keep on saying as writers we only ever address one person at a time and have an intimate converstaion with them.
Love that final couplet. This is breathtaking and captivating. I love it. There is a lot of detail describing the scene and yet you still leave some aspects of the story to the imagination. Great poem!
Posted 11 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
11 Years Ago
I am so pleased that you like the poem. I like your take on the construction of the poem.
okay then...I thought I knew what I was reading, but instead I got high off a moment of drug induced poetry. This is sexy...dirty...and a little taboo...I loved it!
Posted 11 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
11 Years Ago
I cannot tell you how much I like your review. You have a pirate eye.
this is terrific! ah, the blatant abandon and throes of unbridled passion combined with the narcotic effects of nirvana...."he follows her into ecstasy" ....brilliant!
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