To Be a Fish

I've never spoken to a fish
But often thought I'd like to be one
Eyes unclosed, a tail to swish
Worries, I would have none

I'd swim the dark waters of my domain
Searching for my prey
Reveling in the absence of a human brain
That's how I'd spend my days

No desire, no love, no pain
No attachment to a maid
To be a fish, it seems to me
Would be a lovely trade

Reviews

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. ha ha ! ... the profundity and humour in this piece does not escape me, dear poet ... your very intelligent and brilliant "human brain" creates the most amazing poetry ... let no "maid" ever again intimidate you ... this, of course, is a lovely piece of poetry which is immensely perceptive and deep ... from one aspiring fish to another ... thank you ... :) ...

[Terohime]

Love this poem, you did a great job with getting the readers to imaging a fish in the water. Excellent write.
~Your friend Res

[Rosalind Gale]

"... It's OK to eat fish, 'cos they don't have any feeling..." good ol' dead Cobain. Never mind...
I would be a salmon - leaping around and all... later, ending up on posh folks plates.
Or a cod.
What do you call a fish with no eye?
Fsh...

[icaros13]

Excellent Cobain reference. I remember when he was god... Fish also have a memory of only 1-3 seconds, which would be handy sometimes... A salmon would most definitely appropriate. Swim upstream all the way home, mate, then die...

[icaros13]

What kind of bear sees a therapist? A bi-polar bear... (I know, it's bad)

[Rosalind Gale]

He-he, reminds me of once trying to make a stuffed toy, a bear, it had two heads, one was angry, one was sad - I called it the bi-polar bear.

[icaros13]

Lol. I actually was thinking about writing a poem about a bi-polar bear earlier... hence the joke.

[Rosalind Gale]

I think now, it is fate that you do... if I cannot make the toy... you should write the poem...

[icaros13]

Challenge accepted...

[Kristallo]

Still waiting on that bi-polar bear poem... you haven't written anything in too long!

[Baby Ricochet]

HA!

[Corset]

I think i'd rather be a monkey, free to swing the rain forest branches, or a bird to soar the highest heights, or a balloon on a great adventure! love this. :)

[Emily B]

i would swim and swim and swim :)

[Emily B]

and swim some more :)

[zain]

Awesome!

[Renée]

No rent either ( : creative write !

[Ramya]

Fresh and funny!! I love the theme. Rhymes beautifully and visually appealing, can form the picture so clearly in my mind. It makes me think....why am I not a fish? hahahha....too good!:)

[TheReal]

SIMPLICITY :) I LIKE THIS