Ten Tiny Breaths

Ten tiny breaths I don’t want to take
Ten tiny breaths were such a horrible mistake
Ten tiny breaths from me to you 
Ten tiny breaths that tore us in two
Ten tiny breaths were more than enough 
Ten tiny breaths were never so tough
Ten tiny breaths and I let you go
Ten tiny breaths then you know
Ten tiny breaths I wish I’d swallowed
Ten tiny breaths of which followed;

Breath one; a word spoken much too quickly
Breath two; a word that turned your face sickly 
Breath three; a word cried out in rage 
Breath four; a word that broke me from a cage
Breath five; a word that marked the beginning of the end
Breath six; a word ensuring a tear never to mend
Breath seven; a word so fowl it pains me to call my own
Breath eight; a word more final than stone
Breath nine; no word just a breath to prepare
But no breath could move along the sorrow in there
Breath ten was only a breath after all
No more words were needed for tears to fall

Author's Note

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Reviews

[Rye]

I really love the layout of this write, and how it is expressed. well done