My Heart

An attempt at a sonnet

How dare you try and make me fall in love!
As if you should cause me to sigh and swoon,
You treat me like I’m a delicate dove,
Sorry your charms don’t work, I’m immune.
With material things you try to woo,
Thought out words are much more lovely to me,
No it’s not me, of course it’s due to you,
Oh do pardon me if you don’t agree!
Over my feelings you have no power,
Be a man and wear your heart on your sleeve,
I won’t be some princess stuck in a tower!
If you can’t accept that feel free to leave,
No matter how much you say I’m “fine art”,
The answer is no, I’m saving my heart.

Author's Note

looking for feedback :)

Reviews

[Rye]

Love the emotions expressed through out, nicely done

[R.E. Ray]

I love the confidence and spirit you convey in this poem. Your message is clear and unequivocal. So, good job on conveying that strength.

As for the "sonnet," I'm not a scholarly poet, and I don't try to put my thoughts or words into a box. While your rhyming is good, it seems a bit forced in a few lines. You write well enough to convey your message without a perfect structure or rhyme. So, I'd just say write what you feel. Who cares about the style, structure, etc.? Still, this is a nice piece.