Close My Eyes

When I close 
my eyes 
you don't die
we never cry 
there are no sighs

The darkness of 
my fallen lids
blocks the sights
I cannot take 
ones that can only break

what I still get
what I still hold
has turned from 
tarnished silver
to purest gold

But when I open my eyes
the whole is told
the world dons no guise
and you never grow old

Author's Note

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Reviews

[R.E. Ray]

Beautifully simple, humble, and sincere in a few brief lines. It's something I'd expect to experience if I lost a loved one, especially young, in a tragic accident. While the loss is painful, joyful memories remain, and you've conveyed it well in this piece. Nice work.

[Rye]

This is kinda sad yet beautiful in a sense. Very poetic and flows nicely