Love Triangle

It all started the day we talked.

I had never met such a genuine boy,

Such a gentleman,

Such a good friend

It was one of the best things that happened to me,

But good things have to come to an end.

 

We talked for hours,

He became my favorite,

I started liking him,

But for me, things never go straight.

 

I knew his favorite songs,

He told me about his dreams,

Nobody knew him better than me.

 

It all came to a near end,

When a girl,

A girl who was my friend,

Came between us

 

Our conversations subdued,

We only talked about work.

He knew I was upset,

But he still didn’t converse.

 

They seemed to get close every day,

And I had to pretend to not care,

Yes, it’s true that a smile hides a million tears,

And for me,

It was all true.

 

I didn’t tell anyone how I felt,

Because every love triangle,

Every love story,

Has only two lovers,

Till the very end

 

 

 

Reviews

[R J Askew]

Hmm, I am now wondering about love circles, boxes and diamonds. I like, 'But for me, things never go straight.' And I like the clipped drama and observation of Story No.1. reduced to 31 lines, which is a novel for you. I also liked the changed in type face of line 18 which felt like a typographical gulp of passion as I read it.

[iamshadowine]

Thank you!

[Firemay]

I'm really sorry about what happened to you but i'm sure you were able to paass through it and continue on.

[iamshadowine]

Yes i did. And thank you for reviewing

[Rebecca Leigh]

This saddens my heart... i feel most have gone through this type of torture, and I am sorry you had to endure it as well.

[iamshadowine]

Thank you for your review

[MightyMouse]

That's actually very sad. It's amazing how love triangles can affect people so much.

[iamshadowine]

Thank you!

[Grey Evanescent]

I can feel the sadness in your lines. I suppose maybe because one way or the other, I've been there. Thanks for sharing this. :)

[iamshadowine]

Thank you :D

[blackbelief]

The last lines, are really deep.

[iamshadowine]

Thank you ^_^

[Ashwin Shanker]

This is a beautiful story told in the form of a poem. As a man, I was able to pick up a few nuances of how women perceive things from this. This poem also has a good flow and there is scope for more imagery which would bring a lot more impact to the story.

Thank you for sharing

[iamshadowine]

Thank you!

[Junebug]

add some more imagery, metaphores, similes, or a rhyme scheme to add flavor to your work!

[Meshalini]

Painful.....when someone came into our life, it can give us a big smile or can give us a huge pain like this..

you done a very good job...

[iamshadowine]

Thank you :D

[Anindita Janhabee]

as painful as arrows in the heart...
just can't write a firm review..
sorrow is followed by happiness my dear... never lose hope...
Anindita

[iamshadowine]

Thank you for your kind words ^_^

[Anindita Janhabee]

Most welcome...