I wish I could

I WISH I COULD COMPOSE A SONG,

WHOSE LYRICS WOULD BE APPRECIATED

I WISH I COULD DANCE,

SO EVERYONE COULD FEEL MY BEAT.

I WISH I COULD SING,

SO AS TO MAKE PEOPLE FEEL

I WISH I COULD JOKE,

TO AT LEAST MAKE SOMEONE HAPPY

I WISH I COULD WRITE,

TO MAKE PEOPLE ENJOY

I WISH I COULD INSPIRE,

TO BRING ABOUT CHANGE IN A LIFE

OH! I WISH I COULD,

BUT WOULDN’T,

BECAUSE I AM A DEAD SOUL LIVING INSIDE AN ALIVE BODY.

 

 

Reviews

[Diamond Dunbar]

I wish I could do the same! I wish I didn't hoarder so much pain. I wish that everyday it would rain. I wish that one day I don't have to feel insane. I wish that I could meet you and we could write poems in chains. I truly do enjoy your writings my dear!

[iamshadowine]

thank you so much! :D

[FaeryQueen]

Well written with emotions that flow well together.

[iamshadowine]

Thank you ^_^

[R J Askew]

'Appreciated' is maybe a bit of a heavy word for that line.
I like the wistful yearning to be this and that. And I like the bitterness of the last line. Phps once we accept our lot (this doesn't mean we are dead) then we can get on. So maybe the word 'dead' could be something like 'songless soul' ??

[Jackie]

I love the poem. The need, the urge to WANT to make a change, a difference

[iamshadowine]

Thank you ^_^

[alanwgraham]

I guess this is how many of us feel. You have told it in a very strong and direct way. Your conclusion is sad but expresses the hopelessness felt honestly.
Well done for this.
Regards,
Alan

[iamshadowine]

Thank you :D

[Meshalini]

Wow..this is really amazing......

I know you could do more than what you said above because you are very talented person...

Very good poem....keep writing...

[iamshadowine]

Than you so much :D

[dillonjensen]

Wonderful. Makes me think of a Hugh Laurie quote, "It's a terrible thing, I think, in life to wait until you're ready. I have this feeling now that actually no one is ever ready to do anything. There is almost no such thing as ready. There is only now."

[iamshadowine]

Thank you :D

[mou]

tone of this poem suddenly gets changed at the end line..but your wish to write something to make people feel good is satisfied by your this poem indeed!!
nice work..like it

[iamshadowine]

Thank you :D

[matrixmark]

Such a great poem but the sad ending completely threw me. - It was really, really positive and felt so alive and then BAM - the sad ending.

Really good piece - Kudos to you.

Mark.

[iamshadowine]

Thank you so much :D

[Joshua Haines]

A vary interesting poem. I really enjoyed this. Most definitely going to share this XD. Keep it up

[iamshadowine]

Thank you so much :D