Dead, Yet Alive

There's an empty space in my heart,

and it is yet to be filled,

filled with joy,

filled with love,

filled with happiness.

There's an empty heart,

filled with loneliness,

filled with abhor,

filled with abjection,

which is yet to be understood.

There's an empty space in my heart,

yet filled with grief,

filled with betrayal,

filled with apathy.

   AND

There's a dead soul,

residing my body,

filled with mixed emotions,

filled with beautiful flaws

and burnt pieces of trust

which can't be cured.

Reviews

[toderoopoo]

Wonderfully written and beautiful as ever! :)

[iamshadowine]

thank you! :)

[Stan Lee]

flows beautifully as always. :)

[iamshadowine]

Thank you ^_^

[Marcus Sergiu David]

I find your lines flow really well. I love the way you structure your feels and ideas. :)

[iamshadowine]

thank you so much :D

[Aidan Oberholtzer]

I love this. Trust issues can ruin people. Awesome

[iamshadowine]

thank you!!

[zwartenkot]

Wow! Loved this! I loves how deep it was and how easy it can be for people to relate to!

[iamshadowine]

thank you!! :D

[Ruth]

And trust being the biggie in any situation, never easy to mend broken trust and all else falls away after the betrayal of it, poignantly voiced :)

[iamshadowine]

thank you!

[Ananya]

Such a deeply touching write...your pain shows clear in it. But whenever there's an empty space, it always gets filled. Just wait and you will find the joy again. Happiness and love and trust. I hope so, for you.

[iamshadowine]

Thanks a lot ^_^

[Shabeeh Haider]

Your heart is full of grief and rejection, that is why it feels so empty.
You have written your heart out here.
Well done.

[iamshadowine]

Thank you ^_^

[andrew mitchell]

For an empty heart there is a lot of emotions going on, maybe not so empty just undecided cos you can't have both. Nice work

[iamshadowine]

thank you!! :D

[Writtenments]

Very good, but I found the commas a little too distracting when reading this piece. That's my feedback.

[iamshadowine]

thank you! :)