How Does It Feel?

How does it feel?

When you're oblivion

How do you think?

When no one cares

How does it feel, when you’re missing something special?

How do you know it’s right

How does it feel?

Letting your close ones go?

How do you think?

About not thinking about them

How does it feel?

When your lover is with someone else

How do you think?

To not get back to them

How does it feel?

When you’re talented

And how do you feel?

When people just ignore it?

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[H.L. Cerveise]

I like it. The questions show a soul/heart that is in turmoil. Elmarie pointed out the need to make it oblivious, and I agree. If you do not want this writing to be grammaticality correct, then leave it as it is, if you do maybe rewrite it something like this:

When you're oblivious,
how does it feel?
When no one cares,
how do you think?
When you’re missing something special,
how does it feel?

The above should give you the idea of what I am saying. However, again if grammar is not a factor in this poem totally ignore me. I sometimes break the rules of grammar because it would hurt the flow I am going for.

Well done.

[AliciaB]

This is an interesting exploration of the meaning of emotions and thoughts in terms of reality. Often, we tend to think with our emotions - something painful happens, and it brings about a torrent of anguish, confusion, thoughts, doubts, questions, anger, etc. How can we think logically when all of this is happening? I really related to this idea in your poem - I've been told that I think too much. I think people who say that are right. :) I also really like/relate to the final three lines. One of the reasons I'm on this site is that I feel like this is the only place where at least SOMEONE is going to read my work and enjoy doing so. I mean, I love my family and friends and all that, but most of them would think I was totally insane if they read this, and those few who wouldn't don't like reading poetry anyway. So thank you and all who put up with my insanity here. I appreciate it. :) Great work on this poem. You certainly got me to connect with it!

[iamshadowine]

thank you so much !! :D

[Teja]

A nice poem which can relate to everyone . All the questions convey emotions . Nice one.

[iamshadowine]

thank you :)

[Elmarie]

Hi there
A nice poem with a lot of deep questions asked. You could probably take any of these and create a master poem from each one. I liked the last two lines the most. I think oblivion should be oblivious maybe.

Blessings

El

[iamshadowine]

thank you so much :)

[Abhilash Hegde]

A lot of pointed questions, some hidden answers and meanings between the lines.
Nice reading. Keep 'em coming !

[iamshadowine]

thank you :)

[BlakHeart]

Every word hits me cause I've experience them all myself

[iamshadowine]

thank you!

[toderoopoo]

Wow, reading the questions, hit home for me. Each question requires the reader to question themselves and their own decisions/life/actions, before moving on to the next line. I really enjoyed this. The style is amazing. :) Reading your work is a privilege!

[iamshadowine]

thank you so much! :D

[Oliver Free]

This one really hits close to home. I really enjoy your work!

[iamshadowine]

thank you :D