My Heart Lets Me Live

Deep down in the heart, you destroyed me

I had no reason to live.

I always thought of dying

But forgot you’ve already killed me from the inside.

My tears that fell were innumerable,

I couldn't really stop them

Or else my smile would be killed.

I wanted to breathe

But there was no air with me.

I wanted to jump, I wanted to climb,

But I couldn’t,

Because every time you criticized

But I have to live,

 not for avenging you or to stop my tears.

It’s the motivation to my dreams

That stops my downfall and makes me alive

Reviews

[AliciaB]

This piece is very intense. Right off the bat, the title is intriguing and drew me into reading the poem. There is a lot of strong language throughout in terms of life vs death, tears, being unable to breathe, etc. The lines "I always thought of dying / But forgot you’ve already killed me from the inside" are extremely effective. Nearly gave me chills to read that. I also like the end with "It’s the motivation to my dreams / That stops my downfall and makes me alive." It seems like a tiny bit of hope to finish a poem that has such a dark and depressed tone throughout, yet at the same time the feeling of despair remains clearly present. Very interesting to read. You have captured the emotion of this piece excellently through your words. Great work!

[iamshadowine]

thank you so much for your kind words! really appreciate them! :D

[FaeryQueen]

This is exactly how a broken heart feels like. I'm so proud of you and this piece. I love it oh-so much.

[iamshadowine]

thank you!!

[andrew mitchell]

A broken heart has no choice but to move on in the quest for real or true love. nice write.

[iamshadowine]

thank you :D

[T.Y.N.P.]

I really enjoyed reading this, it was so heartfelt.

[iamshadowine]

thank you!

[H.L. Cerveise]

This is a well-written and heart-felt poem. I like the last four lines. People can take a lot from us but one thing they cannot touch is our dreams.

Well done

[iamshadowine]

thank you! :D

[alanwgraham]

When your heart gets broken your emotions are so strong and your world may seem to have ended. There is a future but it takes time. These are emotions that most of us have experienced!
I'm sure the writing helps!
Well done,
Alan

[iamshadowine]

thank you so much :D

[Shabeeh Haider]

In spite of a broken heart, we have to move on in life. Our dreams are a good stimulus that would make us, want to go on despite all the setbacks.
Very nicely written

[iamshadowine]

thank you!

[Firemay]

wow!  Really touching!!  I liked it. 
I think i know what it's about but I'd like to know fron you.  so what is it about?