Schizophrenia

I can see them,

Right there,

Above, in the corner,

The devils

I sit scaredly back in the other corner

With my head tucked in my arms

That is wrapped around my knees.

They are so scary,

They always threaten me.

I’ll die,

They’ll kill me,

Please help,

Somebody save me.

I was always kept locked in my room due to this behavior

The devils always showed up and I had no savior.

I shouted but nobody ever listened,

I scratched the walls,

My nails were broken.

My tears filled the buckets,

But no one ever listened.

And then one fine day,

Someone came in my room,

He was amused,

Because my room had my blood stains too.

He asked me some questions

And finally concluded that I’m mad

I thought he was amnesiac

Because I knew I was schizophrenic.

 

 

 

Reviews

[barleygirl]

This is a very realistic glimpse into the mind of a person who's struggling with any number of mental situations, even temporary insanity! There's a certain balance between being out of control & being ultra in-control, thru-out. Very interesting tension. I love that you don't reach for dusty overused descriptions. Great job!

[iamshadowine]

thank you! :D

[RibhyMay]

As someone who suffers with mental health problems, I can strongly relate to this. Fantastic poem, with a harsh reality to it. Absolutely loved it.

[iamshadowine]

thank you so much :D

[Diamond Dunbar]

OMG you just laid my struggle out in the simplest words. I seriously cried because I can still hear mine screaming out.

[iamshadowine]

thank you so much for your review.... your kind words are appreciated :D

[Insight "MH"]

Amusing how that person knows the problem, but cannot do anything about it, and that what makes him suffer more. You have made a beautiful poem here, thank you for sharing.

[iamshadowine]

thank you so much :D

[Insight "MH"]

You are welcome.

[sempiternal]

wow!! this poem touched my heart. it is a very moving poem

[iamshadowine]

thank you! :)

[Madeline]

I really love this poem. It seems as if you captured their point of view! Great job!

[iamshadowine]

Thank you so much :)

[Coyote Poetry]

I did feel the madness in the words.
"He asked me some questions
And finally concluded that I’m mad
I thought he was amnesiac
Because I knew I was schizophrenic."
I did like the above lines. Made the reader know the madness too. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[iamshadowine]

It means a lot to me, thank you so much:)

[Coyote Poetry]

Was my pleasure and you are welcome.

[Jesse W.]

I work in a mental health hospital and have seen things like this before. I've also experienced hallucinations due to several brain tumors. This gives me the ability to see this poem from two points of view, and both of them were haunting. It's a tragedy, having to go through life like this, but it is the hand we get dealt and we do our best. 'The devil always showed up and I had no savior' is a powerful line, and I know many have felt that way before. Excellent writing.

[iamshadowine]

Thank you so much for your review :)

[Neha Sharma]

A tough reality. A delusional life.
Powerful imagery. Nicely penned.
Good work. Keep writing. :)

[iamshadowine]

Thank you :)

[Maya]

Wow, dark and beautiful. I really love the line "the devil always showed up and I had no savior."

[iamshadowine]

thank you so much :)