I wish to not lose them anymore

I wish to not lose them anymore,

The way they fall have no reason

But because of the pain in heart

Many diamonds I have lost

I wish to not lose them anymore

the way they taste

Full of bitterness

And betrayed phase

I wish to not lose them anymore

A pal of sweat

My face gets horrible

But that's the attitude left

Each syllable of your silence hit me like a knife in my heart

You told me to keep the diamonds secure

But tears had to fall

Because you awaited a call

.......... From god

Reviews

[Emily]

I've felt this way before, not wanting to lose someone.
Great poem!
Keep up the great work!

[iamshadowine]

thank you

[mou]

reflection of a call of beautiful heart..again repetition of some line add a different taste to it..like it a lot.......

[iamshadowine]

thank you :)

[faithmuriithi]

wow! Awesome piece. 👌Congrats iamshadowine

[iamshadowine]

thank you :D

[Neha Sharma]

An interesting piece of work. It evokes such strong emotions.
A poignantly well-written piece. Keep writing. :)

[iamshadowine]

thank you! :)

[Jesse W.]

A very interesting poem, with such an ending that it made me reread the poem again to see what I had missed the first time around. Impressive work :)

[iamshadowine]

thank you! :D

[Cyndy Robinson]

Wow, cool ending. I love this. Very well written!

[iamshadowine]

thank you very much :D

[PhoenixDown]

Very very very good work.
And with such a cinching, & striking ending -- I am left very satisfied.

[iamshadowine]

thank you so much! :)

[Mary Helda]

Ohh..a wonderful write indeed...just noticed some lines and i dont know if you intended them to be like that or you just missed somethings out...
L3.."but because of the pain in *my* heart".
l10..."a pal of sweat" ...did you mean pool or pal(friend)
l13..."each syllable of your silence hits me"

[iamshadowine]

thank you for the review, yes i wanted the lines to be what they are i guess i probably missed out 's' from l13.... thank you though! :))

[Mary Helda]

You are welcome:-)

[Lilaa]

Wow, I really enjoyed this! Well done, I cannot wait to read more :) full ratings !!!