All that you want

On their first date,
Watching him from the pavement steps
Quite dressed up, he was.
Continuously, she kept fidgeting in her dark rugged top,
Until, he lurked behind the juice vending shop,
With undone shoe laces to take care of.
That was the DAY,
When excitement got the better of him,
And he knocked off all, but forgot the zip of his jeans.

A few months later,
When, daylight was just a medium,
To get to the nights, being spent together.
When the wake up make out session,
Resulted in a mini heart congestion.
That was the DAY,
The lovers became man and wife,
After he knocked her up, and promised to stay for life.

A few years later,
When the sheen on the fabric faded,
Left with nothing but wistful eyes and mind jaded,
When, communication was itself a barrier to peace,
And this thought made them further exasperated.
That was the DAY,
When the touch of her lips, didn't make it feel like a goodbye kiss,
But indeed, he was rammed by a truck with a bunch of drunken kids!

She couldn't help it,
Banged the walls,
Poured her eyes, screamed her lungs out,
Finally, she gave herself for her kids to reach out,
In the coffin, when he laid cold and lull,
And, she stroked his forehead with fingers so dull.
That was the MOMENT,
When all the DAYs, flashed inside her,
With a goofy smile and roses in hand,
He once again lit her face all the way up,
Because she knew, she wouldn't trade it for anything in this whole wide world.

Author's Note

Written exclusively for the contest 'Emotions'. It was supposed to make you "laugh, blush, cry and smile" 😝. Do let me know how you feel about this.

Reviews

[Richard🖌]

Well, Kshitij, it definitely made me "laugh, blush, cry and smile", not necessarily in that particular order, and I found some of the wording to be unique when applied in the English language, a few lines exceedingly long for a poem, and beginning every line with a capital throws me off where one idea, thought, or line is supposed to end and the next to begin … though, this seems to be the style adopted by many poets.
With your imagination and ability to create and tell a tale, there is no doubting you have a great potential to develop into a master poet.
I very much enjoyed your poem, My Friend, and if at any time you might wish it, I will be most willing to help you fine tune and turn this one into the masterpiece I think it deserves to be.

After reading through it several times, I can honestly share that I love it! ⁓ Richard

I gave it 85/100, but it deserves to be 1000/100. : )

[Kshitij Srivastava]

I think now is the perfect time to admit, that i have no idea about basic grammar, let alone understanding intricate details of this very fine art. The sole reason behind me being here is that I imagine too much to not express it.
I am undefinably pleased with your .generosity to offer help and I would be very grateful to you if you take out some time to edit my amateurish writing. I am very keen to learn and in no hurry at all. I would absolutely love to receive some basic writing tips at your own free will. Thank you lots for the review and virtually giving me a 1000% :p

[AaronFreitas]

You wrote a great story my friend... "When the touch of her lips, didn't make it feel like a goodbye kiss,
But indeed, he was rammed by a truck with a bunch of drunken kids!" Once I read those lines I was like wow... definitely powerful and full of emotion... it's a winner in my book :)

[Kshitij Srivastava]

Thanks a lot...your views mean so much to me ☺

[mattavelli]

It's a good story. You told it well. I thought it was funny and sad. Thanks for sharing.

[Kshitij Srivastava]

Thrilled that you like it....Thanks for reviewing ☺

[Mayank Sharma]

The poem was good in general but I really loved the first stanza.:)

[Kshitij Srivastava]

Glad that you liked it.Thanks a lot for reading and reviewing. :)

[Gurleen Saluja]

An awesome write, appropriately filled with emotions. Thank you for sharing. :)

[Kshitij Srivastava]

Pleased to hear that you liked it. Thanks for the review. :D

[Gurleen Saluja]

You're welcome. :)