Wrenching

Just a quickly written one.

Butterflies rip through my stomach,

My knee's start to tremble,

A overwhelming heat fills my face,

My heart beats five times faster;

He is here.

His piercing eyes stare into mine,

My eyelids widen, 

I turn my gaze away.

"Hey!" He shouts across the room,

I bite my lip excitedly,

"Hi!" I squeal pressing my elbows into my sides,

It hurts but I do not stop.

I get no more attention from him,

And yet I glance at him every few seconds;

His face has slight changes from the one in my head.

He looks at me,

A question in his mind.

I run out the room, 

The lesson has ended,

I walk home slowly, 

I know I will see him.

Who is the girl in front of me?

Why is she with him? Why?

My racing heart falters,

Trembling on a thin string.

They are holding hands,

They don't let go.

I see them kiss Good-Bye,

He walks through his door,

Taking my heart with him.

"Take care of it." I whisper into the wind.

Author's Note

Please ignore the mistakes, I'm sorry if you don't understand some of it, I wrote it very quickly.

Reviews

[Faith Knoll]

The title gives it so much more meaning! Great Job!

[Kes]

Whoa. The very end and the very beginning are my favourite bits.
Great!

[Ladysue]

I agree the opening is quite powerful. This is wonderfully written...

[Michael X]

I love the opening, it is so powerful and well defined in its place to be a hook. and what follows is a theatrical gaze of chemistry and all that encompasses the spark of love, and captured vividly, that it creates a mysterious essence to follow, you've done a great job,
thanks for sharing your talent.

[Vicki L.]

That first line is really great. For being written very quickly like you said it's good.