I'm Not Crazy

                 I dashed in and out of the crowd looking around cautiously. Every face looked at me as if I were crazy. I could read their eyes like they were an open book. I could see them saying 'look she's crazy' and 'they're going to find her.' How could they think those things? I darted down a dark alley hearing them running after me. My pace quickened into a run. I came out on the other side running against the crowd. They were gaining on me. I could feel it. They could take me. I wouldn't let them. I wasn't crazy they couldn't make me go back there. It was for crazy people. Not me. I didn't have a thing wrong with me. I ran into an apartment, it was empty. I locked the door behind me going to sit in the empty living room. "Robbie" I said with a smile. His name echoing off of the walls. "Hey sis." he said smiling back at me. Robbie was my brother. He was only a year older than me though. "They're after me Robbie they say I'm crazy." I looked at him knowing he'd understand, he always did. "Yeah I know they're coming up here now. I can hear them." he looked to the door. I could see pain in his dark brown eyes and what looked like a forming tear. I heard them now, banging on the door. "Don't let them take me Robbie!" I pleaded to him. "Robbie!" I yelled as they busted down the door. "Robbie!" I screamed as they grabbed me from every angle. I could see him so clearly. He was standing there letting them take me. "He's not there!" I heard them scream as I flailed wildly. He was right there. He was standing right there how could they not see him. "Robbie." I whispered calming down. He smiled as me whispered "I love you" and disappeared. Ten years ago my brother and I were involved in a car accident. He was seventeen I was sixteen, he was killed instantly. Now I get up every morning take my medicine and it in a plain white room. When Robbie comes to visit me doctors dope me up once again. Supposedly I'm crazy, but Robbie comforts me.

Reviews

[Sunflower 20]

interesting twist, but i agree, try to finish it by not stating the truth, but implying the truth. if that makes sense. other than that, i really liked it. :)

[Sarusai Hiryu]

Cut the last line; imply it, suggest it in some other way, by bringing a doc on the scene or something. Just telling stuff gets a tad too tame.

[northern monkey]

Nice job. Good flowing narrative, with a twist. Keep writing.....

[Marina]

nice intro.. upon first read you really don't expect that turn, I would personally replace the first or second "darted" because it sounds a bit repetitive since it's only a few lines apart. But that aside, I'd read this were it a book :)