Perhaps

suddenly, I realized--

that if my mind freed my heart I could have lived ;

in the armor of your love .

Author's Note

" A novelist can tell story in 20 000 words; poet can show it in 20 words. "

Challenged by that statement, I tried how far I can go by 20 words -- and, here it is.

Reviews

[Tree]

I believe you have achieved what you sought out to do, which is to break down an idea to its most vital and pure core. It is not unlike what the physicist attempts to do with the atom... He knows there is something smaller lurking within, smaller than the electron and the quark. He seeks it out as a matter of truth. The poet here is doing the same. Also want to point out the tone of your piece, and how you used the –––dash, then consequently used the semi-colon; and slow the reader down, ––––making your point. This is the second well written snippet of a poem, I've read today. Well done, Belle.

[Storm K.]

short and to the point, but I think this writer really leaves the reader thinking. I love how with such few words you're able to make such an imapct. Nice one :)

[Ed Hart]

yes, absolutely
but your feet walk in the muck
till heart and mind meld

[Antonio Valentino]

awww that is really fantastic..

what a lovely write

:)

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. thank you for sharing this realization with readers ... i love "the armor of love and beyond" ...

[Pax]

great thoughts, i love it.

[EMF]

Absolutley stunning. A truly beautiful poem which has such depth to it, I'll be thinking on it for a while

[?]

oh my...I just realized this too...such depth in such few words

[persianleopard]

This is like Greek logic.

[joshua deathdealer]

"if my mind freed my heart" the depth of this line is astonishing. Few words but with a epic meaning. xx

[Leslie Philibert]

Thoughtful, compact poem with lyrical beauty, well done.