Poem 3.15

Foolish I was,  to have

looked in the mirror of your soul

dove into your core  

swayed into your sweet song

 

Foolish I was, to have  

made mine self  a crystalline

let you conquered my domain

allowed  you to marry my mind

 

Now,  all that foolishness

all that absurdities of mine

are bringing me back on the brink

on the brink of endless darkness

 

Foolish I was, to have

once more believed

in Odysseus and Penelope

 

            I forgot to remember 

            that love --

            Love seldom stays.

Reviews

[Gobinder Singh Dhindsa]

Very Good work. Pen On. Do u read mine to Time, Anguish and Why?

[Neha Godambe]

Marvelous! :)

[Ruthie Igunbor]

beautiful, beautiful!

[Sir Joe]

The ideal relationships shown on TV and in stories sometimes don't exist in real life. They are not true to all people and to all couples.

[Sir Joe]

Ma'am Belle, this is a great work. As I was reading the piece, i could feel you. I could feel the way the poetic person (probably you) felt. You were able to let me, and probably the others also, connect to the piece through its emotional appeal.

Really, poetry is a good outlet for emotional outbursts. Though the emotion you conveyed in this great piece is filled with sadness or sorrow, you were able to create a piece that defines you as a great writer. Sometimes, it's true that out of sadness comes greatness - the greatness that comes from the stronger person that you become amidst the challenges in life and the greatness of the literary piece that sprouted from your emotion.

Cheer up, Ma'am Belle! =)
And keep writing great pieces,please. hehehe

[Belle]

I am always amazed at how you and our other classmates undress layer by layer each literary piece of the timeless masters from the past to unlock its meaning. Often times, I feel that every piece and even the author are being exploited because of the different approach of reading that you are applying. These are how brilliant you guys when it comes to deciphering poems, and you have my admiration and respect because of that, so it is truly overwhelming to have received these kind of praises from you.
No need even to say to me to cheer up, this review and your FB message are more than enough to make me smile. Ah, no words can ever say how greatful I am right now; it is a blessing to know you more as a person.
You have my admiration, Little Brother. Hug!
I wish my Ben will become as principled man as you are…

[Sir Joe]

=) I'm so happy to hear that from you, Ma'am Belle =)

Don't forget that we are just here for you!
We are family, remember? hehehehe

[Sir Joe]

*poetic persona,,,,hehe typo error

[Belle]

Yes, we are family. I can feel that.Thank you. :)

[Revery]

This is very intense and passionate. A write straight from the heart. Very nice Belle. Our best poems just happen like that. 100

[Michael G.]

Beautiful, well formed, easy to read verses. Sadly romantic content that is expressed very well.
Another very fine piece, Belle.

[Belle]

Thank you for the read my dear hopeless romantic friend :)
I feel truly appreciated by all my friends here ( by you and by all the treasured people below) . I am normally not around, yet every time I come back I immediately feel the presence of all of you. I thank you friends, mucho! :) :)

[Michael G.]

Always a pleasure to read your work, Belle.

[Distant horizons]

A foolishness we have all felt. Perfectly captures the feeling of when all we can feel is that love seems to be nothing more than an incurable disease, which we all get infected with at some point. beautifully written.

[Belle]

Love like Hate
is extreme
distressful
makes man a fool



Lorry, thank you for the read. Kisses to you and to wonderful Scotland.

[Distant horizons]

:-)

[Pax]

oh, made me smile... :) glad your writing again...
well aren't we all become foolish with it comes to love...
we become awkward, we forget some little details... or even we forgot to wear life vest and drown ourselves into the deep emotions of love... never breathing as if you breathe each other's air...

"allowed you to marry my mind" ~ that happens when someone already took the other half of your heart...

the last stanza is quite and epic end... yes love seldom stays if you don't grab hold of it.. because if you let it set aside...you'll lose it on the see of doubt...

awesome one my friend...

[Tree]

Moved by your melody, and the deep and warm sincerity of this song. This could of only been mined at the source, the soul. Beautifully sad and well written, Belle. My favorite of yours so far. Thank you for sharing it

JDP