Run Away, It's Okay

She loved to stand alone, 

She loved her independence,

As she dialled a number on her cell phone,

A number that reached long distance.

She was getting on a train today,

A train headed to nowhere,

Normally she fed off these rebellious trips,

But instead this time,

She quietly sat there.

Staring at the floor, 

She thought of how many had crossed it,

In and out of the old-fashioned doors,

Mumbling among the public and racket.

The day was coming to a close,

Her's was the very last stop,

She was seeming like a ghost,

Invisible from bottom to top.

Her suitcase packed beside her,

Her eyes looked tired and weary,

For a girl so young and sure,

Her eyelashes flickered and became teary.

Noone sat beside her,

She was usually surrounded,

The life of the party,

Suddenly, Isolated.

Her laughter seemed to fade,

She hadn't spoken since morning end,

Hours, minutes, even seconds,

Silence is a fickle friend

A one-way ticket,

Clutching onto it tight,

hands folded in her lap,

a tear in her bright, but saddened eyes.

She had left to find herself,

See if she could be someone else,

spend a day observing others as they go and stay,

be quiet instead of getting in the way.

Running from herself,

Tired of who she was,

Missing who she could have been,

Sick, tired, had enough.

tired of being tough,

Her eyes were tearing up still,

Here and now she was fragile,

Being alone was nolonger a thrill.

She realized there was eventually an end,

She knew there was nowhere to run,

She just wanted to see something different in herself,

Alone on a Train in the setting sun.

Reviews

[*Evelen*]

Very well done. I can relate to this poem. To just want to run away so you can find who you really are. Loved it. There was a nice flow to it and great imagery. Well done=)

[Channing]

very touching and sincere

[victoria]

wow this is really good, there is a sadness in it but also a sort of hope, and it paints a beautiful picture. amazing job :)

[Naomi Montana Walsh]

How strange it is that someone runs away to find themselves, I suppose it is hard to hear your own voice when you are around people who know you, well told.

[Mary]

very nice and sad, it had a underline hope that made this poem really good. Keep up the awesome writing:)

[Alana]

I really loved this poem. I read it in my head in song and that's pretty hard for me to do with poetry so great job :] its a really good poem. i can't wait to read more poetry from you. :] great job loved it

[Jeannie Wilder]

I really liked this, I can't say anything much different than the others. But this definitely put a clear image in my head. Well done!

[capn_bribri]

really nice
love the emotion
and the word flow was good
nice job

[DeathByChoice]

I really liked this poem, it captures the emotions of a too-young runaway girl so well! You have such talent and you know just what to do with it. Great job!

[Jennika has a short att..]

I love this poem, it has great discription and rythm(idk if i spelled that right). I didn't see many errors and I loved how you used bigger words instead of plain ol everyday words. Good Job.