The Business Deal

Sarah Catherine Bellham is strong spirited and takes life very seriously.Vincent Abraham Pal is ruthless, rude and a rascal.What happens when these two are forced into a relationship?Will they get out of it together or will they destroy each other?

 

 

“We here by seal this business deal with the announcement of my daughter Sarah Bellham’s engagement to Mr. Graham Pal’s son Vincent Pal.”

 

 

There was a moment’s silence and then suddenly everyone congratulated everyone. It was a huge mess. Champagne was toasted and served.

 

People all around talked about the business deal…the deal which sealed my fate…forever!

 

 

Yup! You’re right. I am none other than the so called ‘son’ of Graham Pal.

 

Yeah…I know! I know!

 

I sound very…off

 

Can’t help it..!

 

We never had that “father-son” relationship.

 

Coming to the relationship, now I am going to have a personal relationship based on business.

Did you ever hear of that?

No! Right?!

 

 

And who the hell could be ‘Sarah Bellham’?

 

Of course a lady and one I haven’t ever met.

 

 

I was informed about this “Business deal” yesterday morning.

 

I experienced a myriad of emotions and topping them all were ‘shock’ and ‘anger’.

How could he do this with me…to me?

 

I tried to reason with him but he wouldn’t listen.

 

I decided that the only way out would be to convince Sarah Bellham to back out.

 

 

I immediately dialed a number to get her information and her time-table to get to her at the right time and place.

 

 

Author's Note

CHeck out the photographs of the characters of my story 'HEART'S UNSPOKEN WISH' at the following link.
More to be updated soon.
http://s570.photobucket.com/albums/ss150/slendersmile/HUW/

Reviews

[Bud]

I was looking forward to reading the next chapter, but it's in the making. :) I like where this seems to be going. Very interesting. I'm not sure of any weak points, though, I am no "expert" by any means. Maybe a clearer understanding of the transitions of narrators? I don't really know. I simply like it! Keep up the great work! ; )

[Lorraine]

Although it sounds quite like a journal entry, I think it has a potential to be a great story. You've established to conflict pretty well, and I was able to see a bit of Vincent's character. I'm sure there'd be more to come. Oh, and the girl is quite intriguing too since this chapter was only dedicated to the guy's point of view. This is a good start for a complicated love story. Nice Story.

Keep Writing. ^___^

[deeps]

A very well started off piece so far.
Very organized and lovely way to begin
this is very interesting.

[Taylor H]

"There was a moment's silence and then suddenly everyone congratulated everyone. It was a huge mess. Champagne was toasted and served."

Normally when something is a mess that means its bad...maybe you could change that sentence a bit.

this was a bit confusing and short but other than that this was really good.

[Silvario]

Nice beginning. An interesting little monalog that sets the scene and the tone for the sytart of your story. No weak points spotted as of yet. :)

[Kelley]

I feel for the woman and just know she will not be treated well in this story.........?
Well I'm off to read the next part.

Kelley

[RosalieAllen]

like the beginning, modern day romance esque. i look forward to hearing what happens. the blurbs about the characters were helpful, allowing me to step right into the story