No one remembers me

No one remembers me

A Poem by Slender Smile/Husna Tayyab
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I have stayed away from my family for the past six years coz of my studies�in a hostel. There have been days when I was feeling low and I wanted to talk to someone�my family, a friend or friends�anyone. Many days in fact. And many times�either I couldn�t

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No one remembers me…
 
One small smile,
or a wave of hand,
is enough to say hi!
 
A simple message,
or a single call,
is enough to say hi!
 
But, the days pass by
and my ears are tired.
 
Not a single call,
not a single letter…
Did they forget me?
 
No one around to talk to me,
no one goes from or comes to me.
 
Not a single call,
not a single letter…
Did they forget me?
 
The days pass by
and my ears are tired…
 
I am all alone over here,
and, no one remembers me.
 

© 2009 Slender Smile/Husna Tayyab


Author's Note

Slender Smile/Husna Tayyab
This one was written when I was staying at hostel....around 1 yr back.

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Strong ending. Great .

Posted 14 Years Ago


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amazing
truly amazing

Posted 14 Years Ago


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Someday we feel alone. Just one friendly glance or kind face. Your poem is sad and powerful. Could feel the loneliness and desire for someone to care. A excellent poem.
Coyote

Posted 14 Years Ago


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Oh, I could see emotion in this.. Just that line 'no one goes from or comes to me'. They have to come, to be able to go from you. Not something one would usually think about, and for some reason that told me something. I hope you're back home now. *smile* Thanks for sharing.

Posted 15 Years Ago


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This isn't very inspiring and emotional, a simple text. It could be made more colorful (darker, desperate, deeper) by adding some metaphores, adjectives. This just didn't bring any emotion, but the theme is serious and urgent. We all once in a while feel this way, It's devastating.
Thank you!

Posted 15 Years Ago


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A hostle ey? Wow. I loved this poem. I've never been in a hostle but I know how it feels to be alone. You captured the essence of lonliness quite well. Kudos

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

you're not at all dear..:(i have also felt it many times.....we have to go through sometimes in life but it is fine!its a part of it..!

Posted 15 Years Ago


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You're not alone. :) I've felt this before. I like this poem.

Posted 15 Years Ago


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Beautifully bittersweet, painfully moving through a heart lonely and in need of affirmation... remembrance... Oh the ache for recollection...

Posted 15 Years Ago


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This is a very simple and honest poem, and yet extremely powerful. I have often felt like this and then I tell myself that maybe they are feeling the same way, and wondering why I haven't called and if maybe I've forgotten them.



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Slender Smile/Husna Tayyab
Slender Smile/Husna Tayyab

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