Lonely...

This was my first serious piece when I was staying alone in hostel away from my friends and family.

 

There's an invisible wall in between...
When i see from this side,everything is so colorful...
But when i see from the other side, nothing is clear.
Nothing is right.
Nothing is what i wanted and expected.
Nothing is bright and colorful.
It's all foggy.
It's all black and white.
It's all dark.
As if...there was a huge thunderstorm and it took away everything...and everyone.
I feel a tightness in my throat and i could feel the sting in my eyes.
I open my mouth and am trying to say something...
But no one is hearing me.
Everyone's busy.
Everyone's on their own.
Everyone's running here and there.
But...
I seem to be the only one,who is not moving...standing at one place.
And then I realized...
There's no time!
There's no time for anything!
No time for love!
No time for breath!
No time for a smile!
No time for anyone!
And now...
I am left behind.
I am alone!

Author's Note

Any kind of criticism and appreciation is acceptable.....provided be polite.

Reviews

[Jwana Creer Yeshua]

I like it...you have a great writing ability. I see at that time in your life you where goni through some hard things. Being along is hard for a lot of people. You are not the only one who is afraid of being alone. Just know you might feel alone sometimes but your never alone. Just hang in their things always get better. I enjoyed this poem a lot. I will be looking for more writing in the near future.

Humbly,
Jwana Creer Yeshua

[ruth]

wow... thats deep..
i really liked your poem

[DanaRegen]

Beautiful poem! I thought it was lovely and i liked how you said:
'Theres no time for anything!
No tIme for love!
No time for breath!
No time for smile!
No time for anyone!"
It really makes you feel rushed and alone.
Very nice poem, and thanks for sharing!
-Dana :)

[Markymark]

Neither do I criticise. I like the flow and feeling of the piece. Your pen and paper are always there, a wonderful outlet, always listening, always breathing life into creativity. I can't wait to hear more from you.

Great work.

MarkyMark

[Wildecat]

This was a well written piece of poetry. A pleasure to read this poem.

[Pratibha]

No you are not alone because see carefully my friend, your shadow is always there, your own self conscience is always there, guiding you, navigating you, nurturing you all the way towards light, towards GOD...
AND A HUGE HUGE WELCOME TO THE SITE....

[Eagle Cruagh]

There is no criticism of the structure or language
of the poem---- it is beautiful.

The philosophical content of the poem is something
else. You are lonely ?
A beautiful articulate girl, lonely ? So, people are in a
rush and people are absorbed in their work and people
are not conscious of you ? Speak up! You are a far
more beautiful and articulate girl , you are great, so demand
a little attention.
I am giving you a page of attention now, why ? because you
put your photo with your poem---I saw it and started this rant,
because you need someone in your corner.

You are a gifted writer, you are a beautiful girl, you are something
really special. I demand that you stick up for yourself.
Be you and command the attention that you deserve.

Brilliant poem !

------ Eagle Cruagh

[Silvario]

I really enjoyed this piece. Creative and well written. It tugs at the readers emotions. I was able to identify, as I feel all readers may, a sense of loneliness is something we have all experienced I would guess. It also made me feel for the writer. Very well done. Keep it up, and welcome to the site. :)