Lonely...

This was my first serious piece when I was staying alone in hostel away from my friends and family.

 

There's an invisible wall in between...
When i see from this side,everything is so colorful...
But when i see from the other side, nothing is clear.
Nothing is right.
Nothing is what i wanted and expected.
Nothing is bright and colorful.
It's all foggy.
It's all black and white.
It's all dark.
As if...there was a huge thunderstorm and it took away everything...and everyone.
I feel a tightness in my throat and i could feel the sting in my eyes.
I open my mouth and am trying to say something...
But no one is hearing me.
Everyone's busy.
Everyone's on their own.
Everyone's running here and there.
But...
I seem to be the only one,who is not moving...standing at one place.
And then I realized...
There's no time!
There's no time for anything!
No time for love!
No time for breath!
No time for a smile!
No time for anyone!
And now...
I am left behind.
I am alone!

Author's Note

Any kind of criticism and appreciation is acceptable.....provided be polite.

Reviews

[Jwana Creer Yeshua]

I like it...you have a great writing ability. I see at that time in your life you where goni through some hard things. Being along is hard for a lot of people. You are not the only one who is afraid of being alone. Just know you might feel alone sometimes but your never alone. Just hang in their things always get better. I enjoyed this poem a lot. I will be looking for more writing in the near future.

Humbly,
Jwana Creer Yeshua

[AngelEyes15]

wow I really liked this poem you wrote there's so many different emotions in it, it's put together well and easy to relate to great job. :)

[a]

To be honest - this is weak. Very banal and expressiveless, one can do a lot better in any genre with such a heading.
thank you!

[C.J.]

wow its a write that grabs you in the begining but ends so sad good job on this write

[Taylor H]

Its a bit to despressing for my taste but its great for a free verse. There was some parts that sounded funny (the second and thrid line) but other then that this was a great poem (even if it is to depresing) dont get me wrong i used to write dark poems all the time (there even on my account lol) i just try to avoid them now. great job though.

[Kelley]

I like this and I bet as you write today your even better now?
Great write!!! Thanks for sharing.

Kelley

[Bud]

I'm without words. This is beautiful.

[Vaishali..^_^]

wow..!!this is great...so beautifully expressed everything....and so deep.....!!
^_^

[Bhavya Kaushik]

This is so beautifully sad, so raw and heart wrenching :'(
Loved the way you concluded the entire piece with such an effortless flow!
Great work :)

[wolfsshadow25]

Wow... This was a great poem