Fight For Family

i lost my grandfather and i still feel as though i should have fought harder for him to stay but he got sick and i gave up with hope.

I meet a dark figure's eyes,

it  meets mine.

I say No.

The figure's Yes over powers my words.

I scream No means No.

Don't do it I HATE YOU!

It says it doesn't care.

All becomes quite,

I sit and stare,

It can hear my sniffles,

It doesn't care.

He is mine Not yours.

You cant have him I yell.

Out of no-where a long faint,

Beeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeep,

Coming from a room, His room,

The figure whispers in my ear,

HE'S MINE I WIN.

Author's Note

Please be honest, i don't care if you're brutal i just want honest opinions.

Reviews

[Wolfwind]

Losing a loved one is never easy. It's the hardest when its a illness that can't be cured, or just the slow natural process of age. For when they go... we have no one to blame, no one to justify the pain we feel. I think your piece created a very solid way of dealing with it. By creating the specter of death to be the antagonist, it allows to ease the pain and suffering. It creates a reason stronger than just fate or just because.
Yet, in anycase... the loss still hurts.
In my life, I've lost grandparents to old age. I've lost uncles and aunts to illness and time. I've even lost a child. In the end, I've found the only thing that really helped me get over the grief, is asking myself... What would the want me to do? How would they wish of me to act and feel? In the end... I end up smiling and taking one step in front of the other. Knowing they are in a better place and that as long as my steps forward a good ones... I'll see them all again some day.

Great Ink! Thanks for sharing!
Aaron - Wolfwind

[zaneybear]

your words just mean so much, thank you

[DJ]

Beautifully written and so relateable possibly for different reasons. Heart breakingly beautiful.

[zaneybear]

thank you I enjoy it lots when people say very nice things, thank you so much, you're so kind

[Ariel]

I love that you wrote this about the relationship between you and death, instead of you and your grandfather. It makes it so much more relatable and interesting.

[zaneybear]

oh my goodness, thank you so much