The Lonely Man

I wrote this poem in the 80's-Yeah,just thought I'd put it out there!

I once was a lonely man who

cried helplessly

for a savior or a friend just someone to rescue me

if I should die before I awake

your worry for me will be to late

you see I prayed to God my soul to take

when that lady I find for this promise I make

I'll give her treasures from above

peace, joy happiness, but most of all love

 

Reviews

[Blade & Blood (The ..]

Sounds like a very sincere (and even personal) prayer. Very thoughtful of you to share this with us; it's very deep, and I'm still not sure whether to classify it as a happy or sad poem... I guess I'll just call it "enlightening". Thank you sharing this with me. It was an excellent read.

Ironically Yours, Blade and Blood

[A LaDy NaMeD D]

wow 80's...way before my time. lol j/k just a decade. ANYWAYS. I liked this it reminds me of a prayer every little kid...well almost every...said before they went to sleep. Yet this was more...heartfelt, kind of sad, but not really.

"most of all love." was the best way to end this poem.

[Ankhesen Mié]

Quite frankly, that particular child's prayer used to trouble me when I was little. When I was about seven or so, I thought the whole "if I die before I wake" part was rather inappropriate. I find it appropriate then, that a lonely man in the throes of despair should invoke those very lines from his childhood. My, my--you are the clever one, aren't you!

[C.L. Wilson]

I like how you combine the traditional bedtime prayer with your own and the rhymes are very tasteful. Very good...

[Lyrical Love]

I agree with B&B...this is totally a heartfelt cry.
This is personal, and encouraging...you are preparing yourself for what you want.
The first move/action comes from our thoughts(prayers), hence creatively
making way for a special someone to be your complement.
Nicely put.