Voices

I hear voices
But am I crazy
Voices say this
Voices say that
They are here
They are there
Paranoia is everywhere
Is someone there
Who are you
I sit alone talk to myself
Who am I
Is this normal
What is normal
I walk home and
It feels like someone
Is following me
But no one is there
I see a man in corner of
My eye but are my eyes
Playing a trick on me
Or am I just crazy
Who am I
Is there something wrong
With me
I swear I have seen a little girl
Sitting on that sign
But were did she go
Is this normal
Or am I crazy?

Reviews

[Grimmmes]

I was a little thrown off by the opening juxtaposition - 'here/there', 'this/that', just because it was a little monotonous and predictable. However, you followed through and used this technique to create a second, continually questioning and maddening voice. Well done! Every echo represented the other voice (or multiple voices) very clearly.

The pace of the poem was quick and maintained an enjoyable beat. The fast pace really added to that mad 'spinning in circles' vibe you're putting across. Again, it did get a little repetitive and I felt towards line 20ish that you didn't know how or where to end the poem. Just my impression. I found you were building pace, but the ending left me wanting a bigger finale. Even a question mark at the end would have signified a stronger close.

But, hey, it's poetry. And it's a personal and deep expression! A fun read and keep it up. Will be looking to read more of your work.

[child of God]

Thank you it's nice to finally see some constructive criticism it's like people are afread to give criticism on here it is needed to better ones writting

[Grimmmes]

Thanks, because I often feel like I'm being rude, but yeah just trying to help! It's good stuff! Can't wait to read more of your work :)

[SmittyJas]

No your not crazy you are hearing the voice of God.