broken girl

This poam is about What my mothers brother made me I hate him

Look at me... What have you done to
my life with your dirty hands?
You took my childhood and threw it away,
you did things to me that I will never forget,
now I'm forever a broken girl.
I was just a child, I didn't deserve that.
I used to be outgoing but now
look at what you have done to me...

Author's Note

This was the first poam I ever wrote

Reviews

[LittleArizona]

Few words, and let it paints an image. What I like about this poem is that you don't give much detail-you leave the reader wondering what you are not only referring to but also it allows me (as the reader) to put my own perspective in place and fantasize not only what you as the writer are referring to but as the reader I can relate to however my perspective allows me to!

[FREE_BIRD]

nice to read heart feeling

[Jamestown]

Powerful raw emotions!
You told it straight up and with boldness,
but you are not anything God can't fix and I
already know you know that:) PTL
Thanks for sharing and b-blessed!

[child of God]

Yes i have grown in my writting since this peice i love going back and seeing how much i grown and how much god has changed me

[Jamestown]

I agree that's one of the beauties of writing it down and being Christian
our transformation never ends, pretty awesome!
Hey check out my new piece thunder rolls you will smile:)

[child of God]

K sure will :)

[Draven]

Not bad for a first poem.

[Scott Metro]

The cream always rises to the top.

Scott

[BClancy]

Wow, I really enjoyed this poem. I think the language and the words you used really showed the message that you meant to convey. It has a very foreboding, empty, cold feeling to it. Also considering the fact that you said this was the first poem you ever wrote, I think it's great! Nice job!

[child of God]

Thank you ....

[∠( ᐛ 」..]

Deeply emotional and hurting. I can relate this pain to many others, including me, Even tho it was painful, its still a great writing.
100/100

[Brooke Graco]

Very well done for your first poem. A lot of raw emotion, very blunt. Keep at it :)

[child of God]

Thank you.

[R. L. Hill]

This cut a jagged gash in my heart. -Favorites-

[Lydia Shutter]

Oh, the anger, the emotional pain and the lifelong scars....you express it all so well in a few short lines. How brutally sad that you had to endure this sort of treatment. I hope writing about it is a catharsis for you and that you are able to move on to a better life. Lydi***