Severed Love

Severed Love

 

 

You say It wasn’t my fault.

It was nothing I had done.

You weren’t afraid of being caught

And your new life has just begun.

 

I am broken and I am torn by you.

You have severed my heart into.

With your dark black eyes you stared into my soul

And I shivered feeling cold.

 

Your jagged sword you dug so deep

And left me in a tranquil sleep.

When I awoke the damage was done.

Why o why was I the one.

 

Left with thoughts of despair.

I lost all my will to care.

Now all alone my life to live.

For now there is nothing left to give.

Reviews

[An owl on the moon]

So much pain that drives itself deep into the living.. stripping one of the will to love... You powerfully express that darkness, and let us glimpse that empty place so many face each day.

[Eagle Cruagh]

First paragaraph: Nice rhyming
Second paragraph: Sounds like you were in bed
'with the devil , enough to give anyone a chill.
Third paragraph: You were hung on his petarde and
then slept peacefully, fulfilled. Why were you the
one ? Probably because you wanted a thrill.
Forth paragraph: Left despondent without a will
to live. Now all alone. When you went to bed with
'the devil were you cheating someone ?
For now there is nothing left to give. You mean because
you went to bed with a louse, you think you have nothing
for a real man ?
Look again. I think you will find a very attractive lady who
will be treasured by the next man.
Interesting write, very well done.
----- Eagle Cruagh