WARMTH

ACROSTIC ATTEMPT 1

WARMTH

WARMTH FILLS MY BODY

A HEAT INVADING EVERY VESSEL

REVOLVING AROUND MY HEART

MELTING THE ICE LONG FORMED THERE

THAWING, I FEEL IT DRIPPING AWAY

HEALING MY HURT, DISSOLVING MY PAIN.

Reviews

[Kathy Van Kurin]

This poem is descriptive in a way that the reader can understand readily. Because of its simple message there is still opportunity to slim it down just a little. of the second line. Then in third line"It revolves" Remove the in fourth line. Last line Healing this hurt. I don't know what you think but your poem is so lovely. Wish I would of written it! Blessings Kathy

[hcarson]

Thank u kathy for such lovely review much appreciated

[Jade]

So full of feeling here, And nicely expressed.

[Marvin Thomas Cox-Flynn..]

The best cure for a broken heart begins in a smile even if that smile is born within the pleasant thoughts of the revenge you shall soon reap upon that one who hurt you so ...

[Sir Drift & Mr. Pulse]

I like how you took a physical feeling instead of an emotion to run through the body. Most people would say Love but you introduced Warmth! I would like to read more like these. Awesome!

[hcarson]

Thank u...not been here for a long time so not sure how late my response is haha

[mou]

it is very sweet yet very deep in meaning..I too like to express the thought in such a beautiful way where words are less and meaning is vast..since from a long I was absent from wc but again feel really good to join here..and I love it :)

[hcarson]

Thank u mou, i have also been absent and hooe to get back to writing, thank u for lovely review

[horizon]

Who will criticize such a lovely piece...it's just awesome...and good to read that you have 5 angles in your sweet house...I wish you and your family always stayss together...I too want a big big family and also a pet...somewhere you've became an inspiration of mine..truely said...I feel this ..

[hcarson]

Hi, thank you so much for your lovely review, i really appreciate it 😊. It is certainly fun having a large family, always some craziness going on or someone falling over one of the animals haha..iam sure you too will get what u desire ...be prepared 😋

[horizon]

wow after listening to you..i think its great fun having a big family..i am more than prepared..but it's not the time...and please share your love moments with your family,mail me i would be happy to read..i do really had a dream of having a family..and hats off to you coz managing such a great bunch of people is just awesome...

[hcarson]

Thank you, it can be testing at times but we get there in the end haha

[hi]

now this poem kinda went slow, like it was not as good as it could have been,
to me a little more detail could have made it good, but i still like it

[hcarson]

It was my first atempt at an acrostic poem so i was concentrsting on trying to end where i could start again...if that makes sense haha. Thank you for your comment, sopreciated 😀

[Inject Positivity]

It can be relatable to any reader Helen, such a well presented subject and you have captured the meaning of the word very deeply... A lovely attempt at acrostic...

Dhiman))

[hcarson]

Thank u dhiman 😊

[Shannon]

I love an acrostic that isn't immediately apparent!

[hcarson]

Thank you s.mi....your comments invaluable as always 😀