Well chosen subject Helen... The second line could be changed a bit, I will try to find out something... The fourth line got 7 syllables I think, that means you need one more, but as I said you have just began to write this form and I'm very happy by the pace of your progress...
Sincerely
Dhiman
Posted 8 Years Ago
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8 Years Ago
your correct about the fourth line..not sure how i initially made it 8 but anything is possible with.. read moreyour correct about the fourth line..not sure how i initially made it 8 but anything is possible with me as you no haha. thanks for your review, as you know titally appreciated :)
Well chosen subject Helen... The second line could be changed a bit, I will try to find out something... The fourth line got 7 syllables I think, that means you need one more, but as I said you have just began to write this form and I'm very happy by the pace of your progress...
Sincerely
Dhiman
Posted 8 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
8 Years Ago
your correct about the fourth line..not sure how i initially made it 8 but anything is possible with.. read moreyour correct about the fourth line..not sure how i initially made it 8 but anything is possible with me as you no haha. thanks for your review, as you know titally appreciated :)
not familiar with the form....but i like the loudness that echoes in the piece, of both an actual storm, and also the turbulence and excitement that mixes within a relationship...
j.
Posted 8 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
8 Years Ago
I also am very new to the form so not entirely sure i even done it correctly but it was fun to try r.. read moreI also am very new to the form so not entirely sure i even done it correctly but it was fun to try regardless. Thank you for your comment 😃
It possibly could, its one of them knes where u have to have certain amount of syllables in each lin.. read moreIt possibly could, its one of them knes where u have to have certain amount of syllables in each line but has to start with a noun, then the discription of it and so on so bit tricky..for me anyway as first i ever tried so certainly worth going back to and tweaking when iam more confident i think, your comment as always very much appreciated harpstring 😉
8 Years Ago
You are welcome. Trying new things-an exciting challenge.
Glad it's.. read moreYou are welcome. Trying new things-an exciting challenge.
I have an interest in writing short stories and poetry in some shape or form apparently since coming here! Being a mother of five means I have no end of inspiration! I'm an animal lover and have an Am.. more..