A TIME TO QUIT

Just a late night rambling a while back.

A TIME TO QUIT

When you desire to be needed

yet you want to rely.

When your instinct is to live-

yet you sit - waiting to die.

When your shoulder to cry on

is the one causing the pain.

When life is so twisted you

feel you're going insane.

When you've done all you can

and no more options remain.

When the tiredness has set in

but you can't stop your brain.

When you only know you live

because you still feel the pain.

It's time to step back and put

a stop to this game, and quit

trying to pretend things will

ever be the same.

Author's Note

all comments and criticisms welcome.

Reviews

[Kathy Van Kurin]

Yes this is a true representation of how easy it can be to waste a life and emotional strength serving and loveing the person. Even our activities can be empty like this. Your point is a very good one and cutting some of the excess filler type words really helps to really make your message come through. I have struggled a little with this and have been doing more iditing. good luck but remember to have fun!..............................Kathy

[hcarson]

Thank u kathy and sorry for so long responding 😊

[Anjali]

This is so true,it's absolutely beautiful. Keep writing!

[barleygirl]

I really love this powerful message & the way it reads feels good with the rhymes & all. I enjoy a piece that highlights the way life is full of contrasts & you've juxtaposed these so well with your detailed choices of examples thru-out. Nice word-crafting: "When your shoulder to cry on is the one causing the pain." And this one is so true-to-life with us humans who are often OCD: "When the tiredness has set in but you can't stop your brain."

[hcarson]

Thank you for your lovely teview barley girl, i really appreciate your words as i know you are honest in your reviews so thank you

[Anindita Janhabee]

wow, ma'am it's kinda great to see such a beautiful piece of yours after a long time... I feel inspired reading your poem, which makes deep impact on the reader with imaginations and emotions...
very good write.. nice thoughts...though rambling, good to see you after so many days...
Anindita : )

[hcarson]

Thank you so much Anindita, i couldnt get on internet so couldnt upload anything but hopefully i will uoload more soon, i really appreciate your lovely review

[Anindita Janhabee]

you are welcome ma'am.. it's been a pleasure reading...

[Inject Positivity]

Hellooooo!!!! What a pleasant scene to see you Helen... I'm glad to see you frnd...

I absolutely love the observation you have made here, I can feel the pain from this write, the most striking of it was the line where you said the one whom we think is the shoulder to cry on is the one is causing us pain... A very thought provoking write sweet frnd... A sad tone too...

Sincerely
Dhiman

[hcarson]

hi stranger thanks for reading and reviewing, always welcome hope all has been well :)

[Shannon]

Wow, Helen, welcome back. Nothing like jumping in with a bang! I think so much if our grief comes from wanting things to go back to how they were instead if looking to find a new normal. I love this one!

[hcarson]

hi, thanks for reading and reviewing, as I said to dhiman, its always welcome. Guess I was having one of them days haha, hope all is well :)