Egregious Talk

one off the head that popped in the other day while on a bus listening to a myriad of calls that nearly made my head explode

EGREGIOUS TALK

Poison drops into your ear.

Untruths whispered for only 

you to hear.

Hopes of separating from you

all you hold dear.

Malicious intent wearing a 

friendly disguise - 

egregious talk containing nothing

but lies.

Careful of what you are told;

not all is as implied.

Author's Note

comments and criticisms welcome :)

Reviews

[barleygirl]

In my childhood family, there was a culture of egregious talk . . . we didn't have an example of speaking kindly about one another. Even "nice" talk was actually criticism cloaked in caring. So I very much understand your message on a deep level. I love the second to last line, becuz it's so important to find out firsthand & decide for ourselves, instead of believing nasty talk about others who aren't present. I would love to see this message expanded, it's such an important point to make. In your poem, "poison & untruths" are recognizable descriptions, but it's quite general . . . details always make such observations more vivid & powerful. I would like to SEE specific examples of such mean-spirited talk & how it can be untrue, unfair, & damaging.

[hcarson]

Thanks, yea that would make things more interesting while expanding on it, i will have a think over it, see what i come up with, thanks for the idea 😀

[Cobblestone Traveler]

I really enjoyed this poem. I like your usage of the word "untruths". So much unraveling destruction in that simple word. Excellent job!

[hcarson]

Thank you so much for reading and your lovely review, very appreciated 😀

[Usman Muhammad]

I don't know much about poetry but have to say that the content of this poem is very different from what I see everyday in different writings. You were precise and to the point.
It is true that sometimes we get bored from the company of those who loved us most and therefore we try to ignore them which is unfair. This all is because of our thinking, our attitude towards others which take us here.
Well written and thought provoking my friend. Keep it up and stay blessed

[hcarson]

Thank you so much for your review, very much appreciated 😀

[V]

I really like the title and how you elaborated on it, the topic itself is something I haven't thought about as intensely as you did before and you introduce it in interesting ways.

[hcarson]

thank you..much appreciated. guess i was in one of 'them' moods that day haha

[Inject Positivity]

How truthful this is, I think your message is for each one of us... I have experienced this situation I'm the past and it still scares me how terrible it was... Hurting or going away from dear ones by trusting those disguised people could be a big loss and it can keep the person destroyed for life... We must seek the truth before trusting someone else's comment on the person we care and love, otherwise we could lose everything....

What a beautiful work Helen, you are truly superb... Thank you so much for this lovely filled with message write...

Sincerely
Dhiman

[hcarson]

Thank you dhiman your thoughts are very much appreciated

[Philip Muls]

Wow, you capture very well here the darkness of words spoken with malicious intent. There are people indeed trying to separate because that defines their ego. The ego likes lies and drama.

Well done.

[hcarson]

Thank you. It seem especially prolific in females..or maybe it is just the ones i have been around haha, thank you so much for reading and your review. very much appreciated :)

[Shannon]

Malicious intent wearing a
friendly disguise -
egregious talk containing nothing
but lies.
This stanza practically screams Truth at me. Well done!

[hcarson]

seems sometimes iam surrounded by it..i get so wary talking to people at college as i know there is a certain grop who only chat when they are fishing grrr...cam on here to look for your and ended up doing this..talk about easily distracted haha!!!

[Shannon]

A moment of adhd brilliance!

[hcarson]

haha...its funny you should say that coz i called my psychopathology tutor out on a comment i found disrespectful the other day and by the end of the lesson she had used me as examples of a person with bipolar and schizophrenia.....think i may have pissed her off ;)

[Shannon]

Oops. It's a joke at our house, because it's a real thing here. Sorry if out of line

[hcarson]

Wow not out of line at all...i thought it was funny lol you no me better than that :)

[Shannon]

Just checking...everyone has of sore spots, best not to hit...

[hcarson]

Not sure what my spots are..or where they are saying that...cant blinking remember lol!!! We seem to have similar humour so if your ok with it the chances are i will be as well so no worries :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i really like the insinuation here...often we should only believe what we see for ourselves.

sometimes others can say bad things about friends or significant others just to stir up trouble...and that will happen if we listen to everyone else besides the person who really counts.

nicely expressed.

"implied" can be such a dangerous word.

it can spell trouble...

[hcarson]

how strange...i responded on this comment thanking you and responding in agreement to your comments but it now appears to have disappeared..so once again..thank you so much for your review :)